1. Posted: December 4, 2019In:

    After inheriting their grandmothers precious doll collection, two bickering sisters visit the estate, but find themselves trapped and tormented by dolls manipulated by a demonic entity and must escape .

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    The logline positions the inheritance as the inciting event, but it's really the first instance of a possessed doll attacking them. Also, the goal of escaping leaves the demons in question at large. Perhaps they need to rid the house of the demon for good to save their own lives. My try: After a posRead more

    The logline positions the inheritance as the inciting event, but it’s really the first instance of a possessed doll attacking them. Also, the goal of escaping leaves the demons in question at large. Perhaps they need to rid the house of the demon for good to save their own lives.

    My try:
    After a possessed doll collection attacks them in their dead grandmother’s house, two bickering sisters must banish the demons to save themselves.

    Though I would typically recommend a single protagonist plot, in this instance, I think the character dynamic of bickering sisters works.

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  2. Posted: November 25, 2019In:

    When the new couple in town, both ex-cons, are suspected of murdering a cop’s daughter, they set out to entrap who they believe is the real perpetrator – before the town’s mass hysteria turns violent.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    ?Also this adds to the other question, why not just leave? They are new to this town to start anew before shit hits the fan, so why stay here? It might work better if it was their hometown. They're constantly moving - their reputation follows them everywhere. The husband wants to leave. The wife doeRead more

    ?Also this adds to the other question, why not just leave? They are new to this town to start anew before shit hits the fan, so why stay here? It might work better if it was their hometown.

    They’re constantly moving – their reputation follows them everywhere. The husband wants to leave. The wife doesn’t want to run anymore. She wants to stick.

    But yeah – in a logline, I’m not sure if I can quite sell that.

    Thanks for your ideas.

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  3. Posted: November 28, 2019In:

    When bank robbers and their hostages encounter a backwoods family, they are held captive for a sacrificial ritual, and must work together to escape before becoming human cattle.

    The_CNI Samurai

    For a future logline, you also need to answer the question of then what? What is meant by "human cattle"? Are they a backwards cannibal redneck family? Satanic cult? Been done many times, how is this different? The concept alone of victimizer becoming the victim adds intrigue but further detail willRead more

    For a future logline, you also need to answer the question of then what? What is meant by “human cattle”? Are they a backwards cannibal redneck family? Satanic cult? Been done many times, how is this different? The concept alone of victimizer becoming the victim adds intrigue but further detail will really help sell this.

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