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Waking up in a mansion filled with vampires, two detectives must work their way through four floors to save a missing girl ? and get out alive.
I think this tells it all. I understand the story and the goal of the two leads and the monster in the house scenario. If you make any changes to this logline, make sure they are small
I think this tells it all. I understand the story and the goal of the two leads and the monster in the house scenario.
If you make any changes to this logline, make sure they are small
See lessWhen two bickering sisters inherit their grandmother?s precious doll collection, they get more than they bargain for with a house horde of dolls, and a demonic entity threatening their life.
There are a few descriptions that often pop up in loglines, one of these is; "...get more than they bargained for..." In case you're wondering, another example would be; "...his/her world falls apart..." The point is that these are a perfectly generic description, and by nature add very little to aRead more
There are a few descriptions that often pop up in loglines, one of these is; “…get more than they bargained for…”
In case you’re wondering, another example would be; “…his/her world falls apart…”
The point is that these are a perfectly generic description, and by nature add very little to a logline. Since word real estate is at a premium in loglines, you’d be better of using descriptions that contribute to a clearer understanding of the plot.
Also, it sounds as if the inciting event is the demon appearing, not the inheritance. To that matter, their goal would be vanquishing the demon, which needs to me specified in the logline. Just saying that the demon threatens their lives is an implication that they’ll have to defeat the demon, but it’s not a clear definition of a goal.
See lessA couple with a criminal past, try to start again in a cop neighbourhood, but when children start going missing, they suspect their neighbour ? and set out to prove it.
A couple with a criminal past, try to start again in a cop neighbourhood, but when children start going missing, they suspect their neighbour ? and set out to prove it.? I think what's missing here might be the goal isn't strong enough. Perhaps if their kid went missing instead? I mean I think it'sRead more
A couple with a criminal past, try to start again in a cop neighbourhood, but when children start going missing, they suspect their neighbour ? and set out to prove it.?
I think what’s missing here might be the goal isn’t strong enough.
Perhaps if their kid went missing instead?
I mean I think it’s fine but not exactly “wow”.
I considered putting “reputable” in front of neighbour – but I want to keep it lean.
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