In response to:?After discovering her husband has been secretly abusing their son, a newly divorced mother takes her reluctant child and his sister on a therapeutic?camping trip?in order to help him overcome the ordeal.?
Since it’s labeled as a horror story, in this case I think having the protagonist be a child might work better for a seemingly more psychological horror. Also, I think this version lacks a clear, definite goal. “help him overcome the ordeal.”?Could be something that takes years, it’s an internal, non-visual goal that has no defined endpoint in the logline. A lot of people go to therapy to help their mental state – what makes this case film worthy?

In response to:??After being held at gunpoint by his father in a drunken rage, a young teenage boy wants to forget that the experience ever happened and goes on a therapy camping trip with his mother and sister, but a figure that looks like his father seems to be following him.?

Looking at this verison, the problem is that you’re attempting to use the background as the inciting incident. In this case, why he’s at therapy doesn’t necessarily matter, the inciting incident is when he thinks he sees his father. As a result of seeing his father, what does he set out to do?

I would suggest something like:?After seeing his abusive father following him at camp, a traumatized boy must ….

I assume it may be a case that he isn’t actually seeing his father, but it’s a symptom of his mental deterioration. As a result of this, what?must he do?? What is a clear, defined objective goal which would have a visual representation for the climax of the story?

I mentioned “Get Out” before. The goal of that movie? For the main character to, you guessed it, get out. He must escape from the people who are trying to harm him.