1. Posted: April 19, 2018In:

    A sheriff is visited by Federal agents who are hunting an alien that has crashed in the hills ? an alien that can shape shift into any form. One by one people disappear and he must find and kill the creature to save his town.

    dho1115 Logliner

    Logline is a little too wordy and some of the information is unnecessary You could try something like: "A local sheriff teams up with two federal agents to track down a shape-shifting alien responsible for the disappearance of several members of his community... including his fiancee'!" I kind of adRead more

    Logline is a little too wordy and some of the information is unnecessary

    You could try something like:

    “A local sheriff teams up with two federal agents to track down a shape-shifting alien responsible for the disappearance of several members of his community… including his fiancee’!”

    I kind of added the last part to raise the stakes.

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  2. Posted: April 9, 2018In:

    Re=edit As a zombie virus infects friends and family two small town stoners discover they are immune. Using their girlfriends as bait they save the community by luring the town to the school gym and getting them high.

    Richiev Singularity

    You shouldn't give away the ending in a logline. Inciting incident: Jamaican virus/immunity Lead character: a stoner Goal: Round up the town and save them before they are killed. "When he discovers he's immune to the Jamaican?zombie virus, the town stoner and his friends have one night to round up tRead more

    You shouldn’t give away the ending in a logline.
    Inciting incident: Jamaican virus/immunity
    Lead character: a stoner
    Goal: Round up the town and save them before they are killed.

    “When he discovers he’s immune to the Jamaican?zombie virus, the town stoner and his friends have one night to round up the townsfolk and get them high or they will remain zombies forever.”

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  3. Posted: April 8, 2018In:

    When a young pregnant woman finds herself unconscious in an unknown apartment, she must escape saving her unborn child from a psychopath who eats young life.

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    variable Uberwriter

    "After waking up in a vacant mall, a pregnant teenager must escape from a cannibalistic psychopath before her water breaks" It's a lousy try, you will have to edit detail for your perusal

    “After waking up in a vacant mall, a pregnant teenager must escape from a cannibalistic psychopath before her water breaks”

    It’s a lousy try, you will have to edit detail for your perusal

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