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The paranormal cases led a spiritual scientist to a mysterious world – a place where Vietnamese folklores collide and reveal a terrible curse between the Dragon and Fairy families, where she will finally find her destiny.
This does sound like an interesting story.? I see it more as a fantasy rather than horror (which is the genre you put it in). The logline is a tad long and there is information that we really don't need. You don't need to write "paranormal" cases or name the type of families. Also, I'd like to knowRead more
This does sound like an interesting story.? I see it more as a fantasy rather than horror (which is the genre you put it in). The logline is a tad long and there is information that we really don’t need. You don’t need to write “paranormal” cases or name the type of families.
Also, I’d like to know more about her destiny. Is it to undo the curse that is set to the “Dragon” and “Fairy” families?
If it is, perhaps the logline could be something like:
“A spiritual scientist is pulled into a mysterious, fantasy-filled world where she must undo a curse that has plagued two families.”
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The logline kind of reads more like a comedy (or comedy-horror). Even though this could work as an ensemble piece, it would be nice to see a main protagonist. The question I have is, so we know that getting high will prevent you from becoming a zombie, but then, what do you do with those who alreadyRead more
The logline kind of reads more like a comedy (or comedy-horror). Even though this could work as an ensemble piece, it would be nice to see a main protagonist.
The question I have is, so we know that getting high will prevent you from becoming a zombie, but then, what do you do with those who already are zombies? Will the protagonist(s) be fighting them off while being high?
I can imagine them doing that, which is kind of why this reads more like a comedy.
See lessA sheriff is visited by Federal agents who are hunting an alien that has crashed in the hills ? an alien that can shape shift into any form. One by one people disappear and he must find and kill the creature to save his town.
Logline is a little too wordy and some of the information is unnecessary You could try something like: "A local sheriff teams up with two federal agents to track down a shape-shifting alien responsible for the disappearance of several members of his community... including his fiancee'!" I kind of adRead more
Logline is a little too wordy and some of the information is unnecessary
You could try something like:
“A local sheriff teams up with two federal agents to track down a shape-shifting alien responsible for the disappearance of several members of his community… including his fiancee’!”
I kind of added the last part to raise the stakes.
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