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Trapped inside their family cottage, a group of detached siblings must battle a vengeful witch and break a centuries old curse on their family.
This sounds like a great horror premise, a containd genre film is what many producers are looking for, and this sounds like one. The logline, as mentioned above, does need some work though. You've mentioned multiple protagonists, which can be done but will work against you in the long run. You're faRead more
This sounds like a great horror premise, a containd genre film is what many producers are looking for, and this sounds like one. The logline, as mentioned above, does need some work though.
You’ve mentioned multiple protagonists, which can be done but will work against you in the long run. You’re far better off specifying one. Can you define one main character for the story? Can you define the event that starts the story for this character? Could it be that one of his or her siblings is killed by the witch? The subsequent goal could be to kill the witch and it needs to be specified in the logline as well.
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I knew there would be that issue with the tokoloshe. So +2 words lol So, yeah, this is the story that's been driving me nuts for years now. So many things about it that I just can't get sounding right. That's why I decided to get the logline right first. There's no point in me talking more about theRead more
I knew there would be that issue with the tokoloshe. So +2 words lol
So, yeah, this is the story that’s been driving me nuts for years now. So many things about it that I just can’t get sounding right. That’s why I decided to get the logline right first.
There’s no point in me talking more about the story really. I just have to get the logline right. If the logline works then I can finally start writing again and get this thing out of me. It really is killing me lol
I’ll have a another version here soon. Thanks for the communication.
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The concept is unclear. The logline raises too many questions, not through intrigue but confusion. What does mysterious illness mean? What are the symptoms? Is this a mental condition? How does it manifest itself?? How will he relive the inception of his condition? Where there no other people aroundRead more
The concept is unclear. The logline raises too many questions, not through intrigue but confusion.
What does mysterious illness mean? What are the symptoms? Is this a mental condition? How does it manifest itself?? How will he relive the inception of his condition? Where there no other people around him that remembered what he did as a kid to stop the illness?? If he did it as a kid why does he need to re live it again instead of fighting it as an adult? Is his goal to cure himself or something else?
Lastly, it sounds like most of the antagonistic force and MC actions are internal, in other words, it’s not cinematic what action does he take that will be visual?
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