1. Posted: February 13, 2020In:

    When Private Investigator Kris Kringle wakes with amnesia, he must use five clues found on his person to retrace his steps, remember his past and save a missing child.

    Richiev Singularity

    Here is the Irony: By calling the lead character Kris Kringle, you take away the dramatic tension. Everyone who reads it is going to know, He's Santa. But if you take away the name Kris Kringle, you get rid of the hook.

    Here is the Irony:

    By calling the lead character Kris Kringle, you take away the dramatic tension. Everyone who reads it is going to know, He’s Santa.

    But if you take away the name Kris Kringle, you get rid of the hook.

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  2. Posted: August 16, 2019In:

    A whiskey soused private detective is hired to retrieve a businessman’s errant daughter and must convincingly infiltrate the clean living cult the daughter has joined.

    Richiev Singularity

    I like this premise, (In a story twist, maybe the Private Detective becomes a better person because of the cult lol)

    I like this premise,

    (In a story twist, maybe the Private Detective becomes a better person because of the cult lol)

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  3. Posted: June 25, 2019In:

    ? When a distraught chemist evades culpability for killing her overbearing boss during a heated argument, she must fend off a psychotic blackmailer?s escalating demands.

    dpg Singularity

    yqwertz:Thanks for the further clarifications.>> bent on destroying her.But is that really his intention? Based upon the further details you provided, he seems bent on exploiting her skills as a chemist to cook meth.And now that I know that she's a chemist, it seems to me that is a crucial bitRead more

    yqwertz:

    Thanks for the further clarifications.

    >> bent on destroying her.
    But is that really his intention? Based upon the further details you provided, he seems bent on exploiting her skills as a chemist to cook meth.

    And now that I know that she’s a chemist, it seems to me that is a crucial bit of information that needs to be in the logline. She needs to be defined as such. Because that he would demand she cook meth only makes sense if she’s got chemistry chops.

    Frankly, I think that his blackmailing her by demanding sexual favors is more than enough reason for her to want to kill him.? What I think would be more interesting is a logline and plot that focuses on? the chemistry that develops between the two characters rather than any chemistry in a meth lab.

    But it’s your story.

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