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After 1000 years of the human exodus out of earth, 8 scientists go back to the planet to check if it’s once again suitable to live, only to find out earth doesn’t want humans there any more.
Who is the lead character? What are the stakes?
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When the parents are detained by weather abroad, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family’s Christmas customs.
Your logline isn't bad, however, I would personalize 'the parents' with, 'his parents' or 'their parents' Here is an attempt at a re-write: ----- "When his parent's flight is delayed, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family's Christmas." ------ Hope that helped
Your logline isn’t bad, however, I would personalize ‘the parents’ with, ‘his parents’ or ‘their parents’
Here is an attempt at a re-write:
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“When his parent’s flight is delayed, a man-child elder brother must take charge of his dysfunctional family’s Christmas.”
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Hope that helped
When she visits her future in-laws’ ranch in southern Texas, a headstrong city girl tries to save two illegal immigrant children when she discovers the ranch manager is using illegal immigrants for fertilizer.
A little cleanup for redundancy and marketability: “When visiting future in-laws on a south Texas ranch, a headstrong woman must rescue two undocumented noncitizen children when she discovers the rancher is using migrant workers as fertilizer” This logline is getting better, keep going!
A little cleanup for redundancy and marketability:
“When visiting future in-laws on a south Texas ranch, a headstrong woman must rescue two undocumented noncitizen children when she discovers the rancher is using migrant workers as fertilizer”
This logline is getting better, keep going!
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