Good logline structure.

Audience is served one “socially inexperienced Papuan girl”, who experiences an inciting incident with one “young (male) recluse”. Love is the motivator driving this plot (and genre is Romance).

So, in the style of ‘When Harry Met Sally…'(1989), what then is eternally keeping these lovers apart? For Sally and Harry it was timing (each seemed to be in another relationship when ever their lives crossed). Or, think Shakespeare and his beloved Romeo and Juliet! Two warring factions tearing their community apart.

Here, in this story we are presented illness as the conflict, symbolized by Western medicine vs.native lore. Big idea, noble in spirit, but well, difficult to “visualize”.

My empathy reaches out to the fatally ill boy – yet it’s clear our Papuan girl is the protagonist … What must she “do” (think verb/action) in order to save her beloved (other than sit by his bedside and have a long philosophical argument about Western vs native medicine)?

Story may be aided by introducing a third “Villain” character. This character causes (deliberately or otherwise) the illness of the recluse boy, and my represent the antagonist of ‘native medicine’.