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As the end of school assembly approaches, six-year-old Michael elicits the help of his older sister to prove autism can’t stop potential.
How are they going to do that? A logline needs to give the reader a clear and concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or the beginning of the final act and set out a clear goal. It must be a visual goal, something we can see on screen, and you need to tell us, specifically, what that iRead more
How are they going to do that? A logline needs to give the reader a clear and concise summary of the plot up to either the midpoint or the beginning of the final act and set out a clear goal. It must be a visual goal, something we can see on screen, and you need to tell us, specifically, what that is.
We don’t need names in a logline. It adds nothing. What is very important here is that the reader understands that Michael has autism. Currently, there is nothing that states this. It is hinted at perhaps, but it’s never a good idea to let the reader assume something. Especially if it’s something as fundamental as your protagonist’s defining characteristic and the most important thing to understand about him.
We also need the inciting incident. What key event kicked this story in motion? Was it Michael’s isolation, or his sister’s discovery of it? Based on the information you’ve written below (NB/ never rely on this bit of additional text to tell us the story. If it’s that important, it should be in the logline) I would say it sounds more like the sister is the protagonist. She is possibly better placed to be the eyes the audience views the story through.
I really like the idea behind this, so I hope this helps.
See lessBrutalized his entire life by an evil, racist, brutal police force, a homeless man commits suicide, resurrects as Christ the Lord, and takes revenge against a homicidal police force.
I just can't see a Christ type being, being vengeful and a killer. You don't raise to that level of consciousness by being a crazy killing person...then half of humanity would be "Christ the Lord" energies. Christ consciousness is about love and regardless of how you justify this by some bible phrasRead more
I just can’t see a Christ type being, being vengeful and a killer. You don’t raise to that level of consciousness by being a crazy killing person…then half of humanity would be “Christ the Lord” energies. Christ consciousness is about love and regardless of how you justify this by some bible phrase, it’s just not true that an evolved being would be a killing machine. It’s HARDER TO BE LOVING, so all your saying is some dude who was wrong comes back and does what he wanted to do his whole life because he wasn’t respected. Feels childish not Christlike.
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Also - just got to a 100 loglines. Huzzah! (Only 8 of them are good haha.)
Also – just got to a 100 loglines. Huzzah! (Only 8 of them are good haha.)
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