1. Posted: May 11, 2020In:

    When a troubled mother is suddenly widowed and a father?s affair comes to light, devastating secrets slowly unravel, but her dysfunctional family are quick to break.

    mlenyesoe Penpusher

    Based on your response to Odie, I think you should try and incorporate the way the husband died seeing as it's integral to the twist: after an unexpected suicide, a troubled mother...

    Based on your response to Odie, I think you should try and incorporate the way the husband died seeing as it’s integral to the twist: after an unexpected suicide, a troubled mother…

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  2. Posted: April 9, 2020In:

    With the help of his undead lost love, a reluctant store manager must return to the island where she was slain to prevent the escape of a primitive evil before the anniversary of her death.

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    Jonathon Nicholas Penpusher

    Hi Odie,   i actually love this premise. its a refreshing and interesting take on the classic horror movie.   for me, these would be my questions to ask:   Why does he love her? What is unique about their relationship? Why is he reluctant? what is it that is making him doubt his decisRead more

    Hi Odie,

     

    i actually love this premise. its a refreshing and interesting take on the classic horror movie.

     

    for me, these would be my questions to ask:

     

    • Why does he love her? What is unique about their relationship?
    • Why is he reluctant? what is it that is making him doubt his decision to go back? that seems like something you could flesh out?
    • Can you make the primitive email somehow connected to their relationships, so what i mean is, its something connected to their past, which is why they’re being haunted?

     

    Overall, i actually really liked it, and would watch that movie.

     

    cheers.

    Jonathon

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  3. Posted: May 5, 2020In:

    A mob enforcer who lives by the strict code that failure equals death, meets his match when ?3 million of mob funds is stolen by a desperate young man determined to make a difference with his life by ensuring the dirty money serves a charitable cause.

    Jonathon Nicholas Penpusher

    i actually love the premise of this, but can i ask you something? who is the protagonist, is it the mob boss, or the desperate man? if i were you i'd want that to be clearer, and its also a tad long. maybe try shortening. this is my version of yours: When a calculating mob boss falls victim to a losRead more

    i actually love the premise of this, but can i ask you something? who is the protagonist, is it the mob boss, or the desperate man? if i were you i’d want that to be clearer, and its also a tad long. maybe try shortening. this is my version of yours:

    When a calculating mob boss falls victim to a loss of 3 million dollars, he meets his match by a desperate young man determined to make a difference with his life by ensuring the dirty money serves a charitable cause.

    But i actually love the idea of your film. very interesting. logline is almost there mate. just needs to be refined and tightened. good stuff!

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