Genres – Page 432 – Logline It!

Posted: February 18, 2020In: Thriller

When a cavernous sinkhole opens up in a bustling city, a claustrophobic geologist leads a team of experts down to investigate, but when the sinkhole collapses, they find themselves trapped underground? and they?re not alone.

Trix Samurai

Added an answer on February 18, 2020 at 7:56 pm

I like your premise - also the idea of changing genre and story part way through is really intriguing. ?Do you also change main character? ?Personally I love it when a hero bites the dust and another person steps in LOL. ?My thoughts are: As you're aiming to flip the story part way through - do youRead more

I like your premise – also the idea of changing genre and story part way through is really intriguing. ?Do you also change main character? ?Personally I love it when a hero bites the dust and another person steps in LOL. ?My thoughts are:

As you’re aiming to flip the story part way through – do you need two inciting incidents? ?One for the first half – save the skyscraper… and one for the second half – get out alive…
When the sink hole actually collapses, you’d need to make sure that what was threatened in the first half (e.g. the skyscraper) either doesn’t actually collapse, or it is that which collapses and traps them underground?
“and they’re not alone” is a bit vague – it could mean many things… other people, another city, dinosaurs! I like the something wants them dead route.

See less

0

Share
Share

Posted: February 17, 2020In: Drama

After a empath singer offers to be a surrogate to her long time best friend, who struggles to conceive. She must overcome her guilt when she is told she could not conceive a child of her own due to her actions, and find the ability to accept her boyfriend’s desire to marry her, or lose him forever.

dpg Singularity

Added an answer on February 18, 2020 at 6:18 am

Keymiser:Transgender must be in the logline.? Must, MUST, MUST.? It's your differentiating story hook.And I suggest using the more common term "empathetic" in the logline.? Spell it out.That said, in the script,? definitely develop how her intense awareness of others' feeling plays out as both a chaRead more

Keymiser:

Transgender must be in the logline.? Must, MUST, MUST.? It’s your differentiating story hook.

And I suggest using the more common term “empathetic” in the logline.? Spell it out.

That said, in the script,? definitely develop how her intense awareness of others’ feeling plays out as both a character strength and a character weakness.? For example, a critic of her decision, someone who knows her all too well (like her mother) could point out she’s always been an easy mark, a sucker for a hard luck story.

And she will also be acutely aware of the negative feelings of her boyfriend.? So emotionally she’s caught in a cross-fire, trapped between the horns of a dilemma, damned if she does,? damned if she doesn’t.

Whatever.? My takeaway is that I sense there’s dramatic gold to? be mined in her intense empathy.? (Are you aware of the Myers-Briggs typology? Your character would score at the far end of the feeling spectrum).

Best wishes with your project.

See less