1. Posted: February 10, 2020In:

    SHORT FILM: In a society where companions unite with a finger trap, a desperate man goes on the search for a partner. After a long struggle, he inserts his own finger into his trap, uniting with himself.  

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    Tjmohr Logliner

    Thanks so much for the feedback Trix! Yeah I understand "a long struggle" is a little vague. Still trying to work out which shape or form this struggle takes palce. Basically his desperation is scaring people off. Yeah I am planning a qutie stylized almost cartooney style.

    Thanks so much for the feedback Trix!

    Yeah I understand “a long struggle” is a little vague. Still trying to work out which shape or form this struggle takes palce. Basically his desperation is scaring people off.

    Yeah I am planning a qutie stylized almost cartooney style.

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  2. Posted: February 10, 2020In:

    A boy is homesick after moving to another country but has disagreements when telling the parents he wants to go back. He then contemplates suicide

    Mike Pedley Singularity

    This isn't really a logline. Check out the Formula page to help with formatting. There's an interesting story here but there is so much information needed that currently isn't here. Read a few other people's loglines and the comments to get an idea what is expected from a logline.

    This isn’t really a logline. Check out the Formula page to help with formatting.

    There’s an interesting story here but there is so much information needed that currently isn’t here. Read a few other people’s loglines and the comments to get an idea what is expected from a logline.

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  3. Posted: February 10, 2020In:

    An outcast mother of four in an elite society learns that her husband?s vacation to Barcelona is more like a sabbatical from his family. With all four kids suspended from school and are in therapy, she struggles to gain respect in a judgmental society as well as be a good mother.  

    Richiev Singularity

    Unless Barcelona is important to the story, you can skip that detail in the logline. Also, you say the lead character is an outcast, but you haven't told us from where she has been cast out. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ "When her husband takesRead more

    Unless Barcelona is important to the story, you can skip that detail in the logline.

    Also, you say the lead character is an outcast, but you haven’t told us from where she has been cast out.

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    “When her husband takes a sabbatical from the family, a small-town woman, new to high society, must help her and her savant children navigate, and adjust to their new community.”

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