1. Posted: December 4, 2019In:

    After inheriting their grandmothers precious doll collection, two bickering sisters visit the estate, but find themselves trapped and tormented by dolls manipulated by a demonic entity and must escape .

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    The logline positions the inheritance as the inciting event, but it's really the first instance of a possessed doll attacking them. Also, the goal of escaping leaves the demons in question at large. Perhaps they need to rid the house of the demon for good to save their own lives. My try: After a posRead more

    The logline positions the inheritance as the inciting event, but it’s really the first instance of a possessed doll attacking them. Also, the goal of escaping leaves the demons in question at large. Perhaps they need to rid the house of the demon for good to save their own lives.

    My try:
    After a possessed doll collection attacks them in their dead grandmother’s house, two bickering sisters must banish the demons to save themselves.

    Though I would typically recommend a single protagonist plot, in this instance, I think the character dynamic of bickering sisters works.

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  2. Posted: December 2, 2019In:

    When an explorer’s ancient necklace is stolen, she must retrieve it before it is used for evil.

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    MitchW Logliner

    Update: When her ancient necklace, which is also the key to a witch's tomb, is stolen by a descendant of the witch, an inexperienced explorer must retrieve the necklace before the evil is released.

    Update:

    When her ancient necklace, which is also the key to a witch’s tomb, is stolen by a descendant of the witch, an inexperienced explorer must retrieve the necklace before the evil is released.

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  3. Posted: November 25, 2019In:

    When the new couple in town, both ex-cons, are suspected of murdering a cop’s daughter, they set out to entrap who they believe is the real perpetrator – before the town’s mass hysteria turns violent.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    ?Also this adds to the other question, why not just leave? They are new to this town to start anew before shit hits the fan, so why stay here? It might work better if it was their hometown. They're constantly moving - their reputation follows them everywhere. The husband wants to leave. The wife doeRead more

    ?Also this adds to the other question, why not just leave? They are new to this town to start anew before shit hits the fan, so why stay here? It might work better if it was their hometown.

    They’re constantly moving – their reputation follows them everywhere. The husband wants to leave. The wife doesn’t want to run anymore. She wants to stick.

    But yeah – in a logline, I’m not sure if I can quite sell that.

    Thanks for your ideas.

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