1. Posted: October 29, 2019In:

    A journalist who escaped an abusive religious cult plans to sneak back in and get his younger brother out, but his plan goes awry when the cult leader’s prophecies come true and all current members receive supernatural powers.

    dpg Singularity

    I believe that the most important part of a logline is the story hook, the element that grabs attention, arouses curiusity, makes people want to read the script. This logline buries the story hook when it should lead with it.The plot, the really interesting part, begins: "when the prophecies come trRead more

    I believe that the most important part of a logline is the story hook, the element that grabs attention, arouses curiusity, makes people want to read the script. This logline buries the story hook when it should lead with it.

    The plot, the really interesting part, begins: “when the prophecies come true and all current members receive supernatural powers.”

    Unfortunately, the logline doesn’t specify whether the powers are beneficial or harmful. If cult members start healing the sick, raising the dead, what’s the problem? Isn’t that a good thing?

    Well, the logline is tagged as a horror flick so I guess it’s safe to assume the powers aren’t a good thing.? Okay,? in what way? What specific threat do they pose? And what can the journalist, a mere mortal, do about it? What can anyone do about it?

    As a result of this fulfillment of prophecy, what becomes the journalist’s objective goal?

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  2. Posted: October 27, 2019In:

    Back in time

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    Jo Logliner

    Back in time A hapless financier checks into an exclusive? 5-star hotel in order to woo a billionaire investor, but finds himself haunted by the ghost of a eight year old girl shrieking to be taken back ?home?. Terrified of losing the deal and his sanity, he begs for the help of a beautiful but treaRead more

    Back in time

    A hapless financier checks into an exclusive? 5-star hotel in order to woo a billionaire investor, but finds himself haunted by the ghost of a eight year old girl shrieking to be taken back ?home?. Terrified of losing the deal and his sanity, he begs for the help of a beautiful but treacherous spiritualist while he seals the deal of a lifetime.

    ???

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  3. Posted: October 25, 2019In:

    A financially stricken screenwriter works through his crippling writer’s block with the help of a misanthropic author, to write the great American novel.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Hi Scott.Yeah I honestly thought there's not much conflict here.I kept thinking it's less about writer's block and more about the issues causing it. (Of which I'm not sure about - whether it's this cocky Hollywood hack having to humble himself and ask for help, or perhaps he has commitment issues, oRead more

    Hi Scott.

    Yeah I honestly thought there’s not much conflict here.

    I kept thinking it’s less about writer’s block and more about the issues causing it. (Of which I’m not sure about – whether it’s this cocky Hollywood hack having to humble himself and ask for help, or perhaps he has commitment issues, or perhaps he’s self-sabotaging himself, etc. Perhaps all of them. I dunno.)

    So yeah – this one’s still quite foggy to me.

    The misanthropic author was going to be this workaholic children’s author writing a screenplay. Meanwhile, he’s this Hollywood hack, no longer passionate about writing scripts who is taking this chance by writing a book (and thus perhaps rediscovering his love for writing and why he did it in the first place.)

    So yeah – a film for writers but it’s incredibly foggy.

    Also: this logline is part of a “Magnolia” film of sorts – I put up three other loglines/stories (the ones with the retired novelist, playwright, journalist) and they should all intertwine. It should be a love letter to writers 🙂

    (Think “Wonder Boys” meets “Magnolia”.)

    But again – it’s all very foggy and half-baked still.

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