1. Posted: August 15, 2019In:

    After an 18 year-old Russian Jew sends his family to Ellis Island but must remain behind because of the 1924 U.S. immigration quota law, his 5-year journey in Europe and Latin America forces him to come of age and finally dare to cross illegally in El Paso, TX to reunite with his family.

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    Forgottencomposer Penpusher

    I agree with other commentators that 18 years old can't "send" his family? anywhere. And why emphasize that the family comes to Ellis Island? US is a final destination not the Ellis Island.

    I agree with other commentators that 18 years old can’t “send” his family? anywhere. And why emphasize that the family comes to Ellis Island? US is a final destination not the Ellis Island.

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  2. Posted: October 22, 2019In:

    A Russian immigrant is searching for the answers of her life in the assassination of Boris Nemtsov, the most feared of Putin?s adversaries. She is finding much more than she ever hoped for.

    Forgottencomposer Penpusher

    The connection between the immigrant's life and assassination of Nemtsov is unclear. Why is this topic important to her? What is her personal connection to Nemtsov's story? I think that making it clearer in the logline will attract more interest to the project.

    The connection between the immigrant’s life and assassination of Nemtsov is unclear. Why is this topic important to her? What is her personal connection to Nemtsov’s story? I think that making it clearer in the logline will attract more interest to the project.

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  3. Posted: October 27, 2019In:

    When a ambitious young Egyptian princess wanting to be a warrior, is tired of her title being the only thing she stand for she embark on a journey to prove to her village and father she is capable of saving them from the horrors of demon king Lord Orthius that is bent on revenge

    Jo Logliner

    It's a nice premise but a tad derivative. Maybe add something that will give the plot a little more oomph. Right now, it seems Scorpion King-esque.

    It’s a nice premise but a tad derivative. Maybe add something that will give the plot a little more oomph. Right now, it seems Scorpion King-esque.

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