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An incisive detective imprisons a man who is murdered in prison while innocent, so he resigns out of remorse to free unjustly incarcerated people in defiance of the system he once defended.
I would trim it a bit, perhaps something like this: An incisive detective imprisons an innocent man who is murdered in prison, resigns in order to free unjustly incarcerated people defying the system he once defended. When an incisive detective resigns for imprisoning an innocent man who is murderedRead more
I would trim it a bit, perhaps something like this:
See lessAn incisive detective imprisons an innocent man who is murdered in prison, resigns in order to free unjustly incarcerated people defying the system he once defended.
When an incisive detective resigns for imprisoning an innocent man who is murdered in prison, he defies the system he once defended by freeing unjustly incarcerated people.
When a remorseful detective resigns for imprisoning an innocent man who is murdered in prison, he defies the system he once defended by freeing unjustly incarcerated prisoners.
I hope this helps.
about an elderly samurai named Genjiro who doesn’t grow up? He gets taken in by his granddaughter and her partner. He has as a childhood friend and love interest a la Wendy Darling and she also rapidly ages. There’s a girl whom he shares advice with.
This isn't really a logline. The format would be: When [inciting event] occurs, a [character and their description] must [dynamic action] to overcome [obstacle].
This isn’t really a logline. The format would be: When [inciting event] occurs, a [character and their description] must [dynamic action] to overcome [obstacle].
See lessWhen he escapes from a woman who wants to keep him, a runaway boy must decide what to do with his abusive father when he discovers that he survived the first attempt to kill him.
Sounds intriguing but I think the logline could use some work so it matches your additional story premise shared. Maybe something like "After running away from home following shooting his abusive father to save his mother, a preteen boy escapes domestic captivity and returns home to discover his fatRead more
Sounds intriguing but I think the logline could use some work so it matches your additional story premise shared.
Maybe something like “After running away from home following shooting his abusive father to save his mother, a preteen boy escapes domestic captivity and returns home to discover his father is still alive and his mother is not.”
I dunno. That’s my stab at it. I feel like the story needs a little more drama element to make it more enticing.
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