1. Posted: August 10, 2022In:

    A disgraced detective reassigned to a residential police box discovers a grisly murder and must protect her daughter from a serial killer targeting young women.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi mobiuswest, How about this one: A demoted police detective must protect her daughter from a serial killer after witnessing a grisly homicide that occurs in her newly assigned workplace. I hope this helps.

    Hi mobiuswest,

    How about this one:

    A demoted police detective must protect her daughter from a serial killer after witnessing a grisly homicide that occurs in her newly assigned workplace.

    I hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: August 5, 2022In:

    After getting a stuffed yak as a birthday present, a young Tibetan girl discovers that it turns into a real one.

    Philippe Le Miere Logliner

    Fantasy or Comedy? ... Made me laugh! :) "a young Tibetan girl" = protagonist "stuffed yak transforms into a real one" = inciting incident What might be the main character's goal? If we unpack Pinocchio, here we have a toy, transforming into a real one, but it is the story of the toy's misadventuresRead more

    Fantasy or Comedy? … Made me laugh! 🙂

    “a young Tibetan girl” = protagonist

    “stuffed yak transforms into a real one” = inciting incident

    What might be the main character’s goal?

    If we unpack Pinocchio, here we have a toy, transforming into a real one, but it is the story of the toy’s misadventures. Or then there’s ‘Pygmalion and Galatea’, a love story, where a sculpture transforms into a real, beautiful woman.

    While ‘Tibetan’ has cultural stereotypes, such as the practice of Buddhism, another suggestion might be to additionally reflect on the psychology of the girl. A single adjective, such as shy, courage, or intelligent, could give a clue as to how she might react to the unfolding adventures before her.

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  3. Posted: August 7, 2022In:

    A reckless guy with a secret smartphone app must go back in time and undo his courtship with his cousin when he accidentally impregnates her.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi NavCR, Reading your proposed logline and the short synopsis you provided, I see something like this: A mischievous lonely guy must use a mysterious app on his cell phone to go back in time and undo the events that resulted in him impregnating his cousin. I hope you this helps

    Hi NavCR,

    Reading your proposed logline and the short synopsis you provided, I see something like this:

    A mischievous lonely guy must use a mysterious app on his cell phone to go back in time and undo the events that resulted in him impregnating his cousin.

    I hope you this helps

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