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A charismatic aristocrat returns home and enters a marriage of convenience with a reserved London lawyer to save his failing family estate.
Your logline kinda answers itself. Problem: the lead character must save his family estate. Answer: marries a reserved London Lawyer Problems solved. Where is the conflict and who is standing in the lead character's way?
Your logline kinda answers itself.
Problem: the lead character must save his family estate.
Answer: marries a reserved London Lawyer
Problems solved.
Where is the conflict and who is standing in the lead character’s way?
See lessWhile waiting for the results of some tests, Marc, a young man with cancer, meets Oscar. The two young men end up having an exciting romantic relationship. After discharge the boys decide to take a trip around the world. But your secrets will come out.
The logline is not presented in the format that is recommended on this site. Please have a look at the tutorials under "START HERE" and "Formula". Leaving our recommended format aside, this is still not an industry standard logline. You'll do so much better following the advice we give. A few pointeRead more
The logline is not presented in the format that is recommended on this site. Please have a look at the tutorials under “START HERE” and “Formula”.
Leaving our recommended format aside, this is still not an industry standard logline. You’ll do so much better following the advice we give.
A few pointers:
– don’t name the characters. The story needs to work without names.
– write it in ONE sentence. This is a paragraph synopsis.
– focus on what you want the reader to imagine in terms of action. Right now, there is none.
Good luck.
See lessWaiting for the results of a tests, Marc, a boy with cancer, meets Oscar in a hospital. The two young men end up having an exciting relationship, deciding to take a trip around the world. But not everything is what it seems, there is always something left of the cancer on Marc and secrets they try hide, which will soon come to light.
This leaves a lot of questions. When you say boy, I picture a child. But then you say they take a trip around the world, but I thought he was in the hospital awaiting test results. Is this exciting relationship a friendship or a romance? I don't understand the goal of the main character, is it to taRead more
This leaves a lot of questions. When you say boy, I picture a child. But then you say they take a trip around the world, but I thought he was in the hospital awaiting test results. Is this exciting relationship a friendship or a romance? I don’t understand the goal of the main character, is it to take a trip before he dies? Also, it’s quite long and wordy for a logline which should really be one sentence if it can be.
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