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An anthology of eleven short stories about people discovering love and romance in the Big Apple.
I'm afraid this is very vague, I can't see the intended direction this anthology is meant to be going. I'll forgive you in the sense that anything anthological is going to be hard to pitch in the first place, but be mindful that people don't give loglines the benefit of the doubt. Either they sparkRead more
I’m afraid this is very vague, I can’t see the intended direction this anthology is meant to be going. I’ll forgive you in the sense that anything anthological is going to be hard to pitch in the first place, but be mindful that people don’t give loglines the benefit of the doubt. Either they spark a clear idea into the reader’s head, or they don’t. Since this pitch comes off as unfinished, the reader is going to assume the same of your written work and see your logline as being representative of an unfocused anthology.
As for some specifics I at least some idea of a compelling character, whether that be a broad description of the character’s themselves or perhaps even the character of the city that they all share. Now that I’ve said that, I think your best bet would be to put a spin on the Big Apple and make it unique to your story. However given the added trouble of trying to fit in character goals, an inciting incident and stakes, I think you would be better off making individual loglines for each short story. This is especially true if there is little overlapping between the eleven short stories.
See lessWhen a socially inexperienced Papuan girl falls in love with a young recluse who acquires a fatal illness, she must convince him to abandon his western heritage and accept her native traditions to save his life.
Good logline structure. Audience is served one "socially inexperienced Papuan girl", who experiences an inciting incident with one "young (male) recluse". Love is the motivator driving this plot (and genre is Romance). So, in the style of 'When Harry Met Sally...'(1989), what then is eternally keepiRead more
Good logline structure.
Audience is served one “socially inexperienced Papuan girl”, who experiences an inciting incident with one “young (male) recluse”. Love is the motivator driving this plot (and genre is Romance).
So, in the style of ‘When Harry Met Sally…'(1989), what then is eternally keeping these lovers apart? For Sally and Harry it was timing (each seemed to be in another relationship when ever their lives crossed). Or, think Shakespeare and his beloved Romeo and Juliet! Two warring factions tearing their community apart.
Here, in this story we are presented illness as the conflict, symbolized by Western medicine vs.native lore. Big idea, noble in spirit, but well, difficult to “visualize”.
My empathy reaches out to the fatally ill boy – yet it’s clear our Papuan girl is the protagonist … What must she “do” (think verb/action) in order to save her beloved (other than sit by his bedside and have a long philosophical argument about Western vs native medicine)?
Story may be aided by introducing a third “Villain” character. This character causes (deliberately or otherwise) the illness of the recluse boy, and my represent the antagonist of ‘native medicine’.
See lessA woman, who can predict whether couples are in love, wants her old life back after well-intentioned friends turn her into an internet sensation, and she loses her magic touch and is outed as a fraud.
Leaning towards: "A gifted love doctor must regain her magic touch after discovering the downside of internet stardom" Take care.
Leaning towards:
“A gifted love doctor must regain her magic touch after discovering the downside of internet stardom”
Take care.
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