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  1. Posted: October 5, 2017In: SciFi

    An Alien had been adopt by a village of savage,but the savage don’t know it’s an alien so they treat it like an animal,few year later the alien start to find who he is and where he come from.

    Neer Shelter Singularity
    Added an answer on October 5, 2017 at 10:58 am

    Again, please read the comments made on your other posts as they all apply here as well. Why is the alien in the village? What does he or she want? And why does he or she want it?

    Again, please read the comments made on your other posts as they all apply here as well.

    Why is the alien in the village? What does he or she want? And why does he or she want it?

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  2. Posted: September 24, 2017In: SciFi

    After a happy-go-lucky Marine survives an assassination attempt, he goes after the man behind it, a rogue officer, and stop him from selling WMDs to the government of an enemy planet.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on September 26, 2017 at 6:31 am

    >>> don?t know why a cloned Marine would be any less capable than a Marine who?d been born the ?normal? way, as it were 1] In your story world, you can have cloning as a perfected technique, of course. ?My response was based on the scientific fact that when cloning was first tried (on sheepRead more

    >>> don?t know why a cloned Marine would be any less capable than a Marine who?d been born the ?normal? way, as it were

    1] In your story world, you can have cloning as a perfected technique, of course. ?My response was based on the scientific fact that when cloning was first tried (on sheep), the clones turned out to be inferior copies. ?The explanation at the time was by way of analogy to xeroxing, where copies are never as good as the original.

    2] And if cloning has been perfected, then what is his character flaw? ?The?dramatic purpose of a character flaw is to create suspense in the form of doubt or uncertainty as to whether it will be the downfall of the character in his dramatic quest. ?(How does “happy go lucky” put him in jeopardy of failing?)

    It’s necessary for a protagonist to face life-threatening external jeopardy ?– but that isn’t sufficient. ?The external jeopardy needs to be complemented by an internal weakness or flaw — an “Achilles heel”. ? I say complement in that the flaw or weakness must be engineered such that the external jeopardy threatens to exploit it and defeat (and kill) the protagonist. And I don’t see how being “happy go lucky” fits that criterion.

    My point ?is that cloning is an opportunity to introduce a character flaw. In the story, the clones can be advertised and certified as 100% perfect by the manufacturer — which only means, must mean, that there is a hidden flaw. ?The iron law of dramatic irony and dialectical contradiction.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: September 18, 2017In: SciFi

    A cloned Marine persuades his superiors to send him and two others on a covert mission to an enemy planet, to prevent a rogue officer from starting an interstellar war.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on September 19, 2017 at 3:44 am

    Why does he volunteer? ?IOW: ?what's the inciting incident that motivates him?And ?what is the dramatic purpose of having a cloned character for a protagonist? ?Why does the story require sending a cloned Marine to do a Marine's job instead of a real Marine?>>>starting an interstellar warBeRead more

    Why does he volunteer? ?IOW: ?what’s the inciting incident that motivates him?

    And ?what is the dramatic purpose of having a cloned character for a protagonist? ?Why does the story require sending a cloned Marine to do a Marine’s job instead of a real Marine?

    >>>starting an interstellar war

    Between whom? ?Different colonies of humans? Between homo sapiens and another species? ?Do earthlings have a dog ?in this interstellar war? ??

    What is the personal story hook for you? ?What intrigues you about this story that you must write it? ?The notion of cloned humans fighting as proxy Marines, doing humans’ dirty work? ?Or is it the personal hook the threat of an interstellar war? ?And if that latter, what makes the interstellar war you have in mind, unique, different from all the other interstellar wars in all the other scifi movies?

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