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A prostitute finds herself in a futuristic world of cyborgs with four other girls.
Great start, but what is their goal, and who or what is stopping them from achieving it? Check out Blade Runner 2049 for research.
Great start, but what is their goal, and who or what is stopping them from achieving it?
Check out Blade Runner 2049 for research.
See lessLogline . AD 2005 . Ajay. A young man dies in car accident but his girlfriend Maya survived. 25 years later Ajay would be brought back to life with futuristic technology . Will he find his ladylove and live happily ever after with their only love child?
Interesting take on a love story, consider the following: I started with this “Clinically dead for twenty-five years, a trust-fund baby is brought out of stasis only to discover ...” But your premise is not about him doing a job for the people who brought him back e.g., “Demolition Man” – it’s a lovRead more
Interesting take on a love story, consider the following:
I started with this “Clinically dead for twenty-five years, a trust-fund baby is brought out of stasis only to discover …” But your premise is not about him doing a job for the people who brought him back e.g., “Demolition Man” – it’s a love story after that, hmm.
How about:
“A once betrothed young man must rekindle a lost love in order to find his love-child-now-adult when awoke from a twenty-five-year stasis sleep”
Hope you find this constructive, keep going!
Fun fact: I will take a shot of whiskey for each hyphen used 😉
See lessWhen a young 2.0 human called Uluru meets other humans like him, he must decide if he stays with the pygmy tribe that accepted him as one of their own or leave the tribe searching for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans.
"Young 2.0 human" = protagonist "meets other humans like him" = inciting incident "must ... search for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans" = character goal Great log line. Sci-fi is a favorite genre. If this were my logline, I'd go deeper on the 'Sophie's Choice (1982)' like dilemma presenRead more
“Young 2.0 human” = protagonist
“meets other humans like him” = inciting incident
“must … search for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans” = character goal
Great log line. Sci-fi is a favorite genre. If this were my logline, I’d go deeper on the ‘Sophie’s Choice (1982)’ like dilemma presented by the main cyborg character.
An inciting incident is usually an event that catapults the character into the story crucible. They are literally trapped, in a place that makes them feel very (very) uncomfortable.
What ‘type’ of character is the cyborg? Courageous/weak? Curious/incurious? Optimistic/Pessimistic?
By defining the personality type, the audience can then anticipate how much the character is going to squirm in the given situation. A choice to stay with friendly people, or find a promise land, will very much reflect the values of a character. A Weak, incurious and pessimistic character, would I imagine, stay in safety with the group. But what if this same character where rejected by the group – wow, what an adventure they might have. They may even transform, character arcing into a new amazing person …
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