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Logline . AD 2005 . Ajay. A young man dies in car accident but his girlfriend Maya survived. 25 years later Ajay would be brought back to life with futuristic technology . Will he find his ladylove and live happily ever after with their only love child?
Interesting take on a love story, consider the following: I started with this “Clinically dead for twenty-five years, a trust-fund baby is brought out of stasis only to discover ...” But your premise is not about him doing a job for the people who brought him back e.g., “Demolition Man” – it’s a lovRead more
Interesting take on a love story, consider the following:
I started with this “Clinically dead for twenty-five years, a trust-fund baby is brought out of stasis only to discover …” But your premise is not about him doing a job for the people who brought him back e.g., “Demolition Man” – it’s a love story after that, hmm.
How about:
“A once betrothed young man must rekindle a lost love in order to find his love-child-now-adult when awoke from a twenty-five-year stasis sleep”
Hope you find this constructive, keep going!
Fun fact: I will take a shot of whiskey for each hyphen used 😉
See lessWhen a young 2.0 human called Uluru meets other humans like him, he must decide if he stays with the pygmy tribe that accepted him as one of their own or leave the tribe searching for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans.
"Young 2.0 human" = protagonist "meets other humans like him" = inciting incident "must ... search for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans" = character goal Great log line. Sci-fi is a favorite genre. If this were my logline, I'd go deeper on the 'Sophie's Choice (1982)' like dilemma presenRead more
“Young 2.0 human” = protagonist
“meets other humans like him” = inciting incident
“must … search for a promised land occupied by other 2.0 humans” = character goal
Great log line. Sci-fi is a favorite genre. If this were my logline, I’d go deeper on the ‘Sophie’s Choice (1982)’ like dilemma presented by the main cyborg character.
An inciting incident is usually an event that catapults the character into the story crucible. They are literally trapped, in a place that makes them feel very (very) uncomfortable.
What ‘type’ of character is the cyborg? Courageous/weak? Curious/incurious? Optimistic/Pessimistic?
By defining the personality type, the audience can then anticipate how much the character is going to squirm in the given situation. A choice to stay with friendly people, or find a promise land, will very much reflect the values of a character. A Weak, incurious and pessimistic character, would I imagine, stay in safety with the group. But what if this same character where rejected by the group – wow, what an adventure they might have. They may even transform, character arcing into a new amazing person …
See lessIn the year 2112, Tom Sawyer discovers a guitar, forbidden by The Priests of Syrinx. Embracing The Spirit of Radio, Tom wants to express his Freewill through music. Forced to Fly By Night, he uncovers a secret Closer to the Heart that threatens the governing technocracy.
Was he transported to 2112, already establishing a sci-fi element? Or is this a new story? Overall, I think you could get your three sentences down to one by eliminating repetition. This sounds a lot like the stage play "We Will Rock You." Personally, the Rush songs are not relatable to me but if thRead more
Was he transported to 2112, already establishing a sci-fi element? Or is this a new story? Overall, I think you could get your three sentences down to one by eliminating repetition. This sounds a lot like the stage play “We Will Rock You.” Personally, the Rush songs are not relatable to me but if this was a favorite band of mine, maybe it would hit more? Either way, this sounds like a great story for older rock fans. You would have to target very specifically when querying.
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