1. Posted: June 2, 2021In:

    Fear of monetary demise turns the globe into a top-security prison; Buddha senses implosion; looms with a pragmatic paragon to unzip recession and stress from deceptive human life; enlightens three lost children who endure from NASA plane crash in Vedic woods.

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    Odie Samurai

    Interesting premise, consider the following: 1. I struggle with your major event - the fifth Buddha’s return / following these three youngsters. 2. Your world is great, but who is your baddie? 3. Concerning the three youngsters, is the fifth Buddha reborn through one of them? Example: “In a collapsiRead more

    Interesting premise, consider the following:
    1. I struggle with your major event – the fifth Buddha’s return / following these three youngsters.
    2. Your world is great, but who is your baddie?
    3. Concerning the three youngsters, is the fifth Buddha reborn through one of them?

    Example:
    “In a collapsing global police state, a reincarnate fifth Buddha sets out to restore nirvana to the world”

    I only have a basic understanding of Buddhism – maybe use my thoughts/questions as a good example of your typical reader.

    Keep going, take care.

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  2. Posted: May 27, 2021In:

    A researcher stumbles upon a group of young children, who can communicate without being connected, but he’s shocked to discover that the children wish to eradicate their elders–and particularly the researcher.

    Odie Samurai

    Consider the following: 1. What is your protag’s field of research? 2. “communicate without being connected” – telepathic? 3. What is an elder - their parents? 4. Why do these children want to snuff him out? To keep their secret of world domination - what is their goal? Keep going! BTW: Checkout 199Read more

    Consider the following:
    1. What is your protag’s field of research?
    2. “communicate without being connected” – telepathic?
    3. What is an elder – their parents?
    4. Why do these children want to snuff him out? To keep their secret of world domination – what is their goal?

    Keep going!

    BTW: Checkout 1995’s “Village of the Dammed” and the 81 classic “Scanners” for some fun research.

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  3. Posted: May 26, 2021In:

    When an Earth colony ship teacher discovers his government is hiding information and executing it’s citizens, he must find a way to hide from the governments watchful eyes and rebel; but when his friends are captured he must find a way to overthrow the government to save his friends and free his people.

    Odie Samurai

    Thanks for the synopsis, consider the following: 1. A teacher suddenly missing students is a good inciting incident. 2. To keep your protag from having a passive goal e.g., follows rebels, consider adding a rescue mission that is anything but, and the “mission for equality” becomes his arc. 3. GoverRead more

    Thanks for the synopsis, consider the following:
    1. A teacher suddenly missing students is a good inciting incident.
    2. To keep your protag from having a passive goal e.g., follows rebels, consider adding a rescue mission that is anything but, and the “mission for equality” becomes his arc.
    3. Governments are big and vague, if keeping in the logline, try focusing the mission against one e.g., benevolent leader 😉 ~ Fallout game reference.

    Based on your synopsis, I can glean the following – make these yours:
    “Set on an Earth colony ship in a dystopian future, a loyalist teacher’s rescue mission to recover missing activist students turns into a quest for equality”
    OR
    “When radicalized students go missing, a loyalist teacher on an Earth colony ship sets out to …“

    BTW, love the twist – they’re not actually in space!

    Keep going, take care.

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