1. Posted: May 19, 2020In:

    In a post-civilization future, when an old project of reintroducing the human species on Earth is activated, a young 2.0 lonely human travels across the world, to be with others like him, just to end up disappointed with the new civilization being developed.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    There are too many threads to this narrative for the logline to make sense. Describe one major event that motivates the human 2.0 to take action in pursuit of one clear goal.? Also, no need to name the character. Check out the 'Formula' tab on the top bar for more information on logline structure anRead more

    There are too many threads to this narrative for the logline to make sense.

    Describe one major event that motivates the human 2.0 to take action in pursuit of one clear goal.? Also, no need to name the character.

    Check out the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar for more information on logline structure and conventions.

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  2. Posted: May 19, 2020In:

    On a post-apocalyptic Earth with one side continually facing the sun, a gritty outsider and the metaphysical representation of his soul are forced into facing a new tyrannical regime that threatens the last remains of humanity.

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    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Arguably, so are all the other survivors. What is it specifically about this dude that makes his struggle against the regime interesting, or rather more interesting than anyone else's?

    Arguably, so are all the other survivors. What is it specifically about this dude that makes his struggle against the regime interesting, or rather more interesting than anyone else’s?

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  3. Posted: May 19, 2020In:

    250 years after an asteroid impact leaves one side of Earth continually facing the sun, a lone outsider tries to find a new home in an increasingly more hostile world with the help of a physical manifestation of his soul.

    Odie Samurai

    Sounds intriguing dandahlson, When I first read the logline, I read into it ?a lone outsider tries to find a new world? ? because I couldn?t wrap my head around this asteroid stopping the rotation/axis of the earth so that only a single side faces the sun? Please elaborate. "a lone outsider" is hardRead more

    Sounds intriguing dandahlson,

    • When I first read the logline, I read into it ?a lone outsider tries to find a new world? ? because I couldn?t wrap my head around this asteroid stopping the rotation/axis of the earth so that only a single side faces the sun? Please elaborate.
    • “a lone outsider” is hard to picture, I get since the asteroid there are fewer folks, but I believe this protag description can be strengthened. Why is he an outsider?
    • Add more intent by replacing ?tries to find? with: must, is forced, etc.
    • Why is the world more hostile? Is it now a post-apocalyptic setting? Are earth’s creatures/people feral?
    • I see this physical manifestation (soul) as him talking to himself as he journeys, is that right?
    • Finally, what happens if he does not find a new home in time or loses is his soul?

    Take care.

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