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On the bottom floor of a skyscraper, which is the last refuge of humanity after a devastating plague, a cunning thief must lead a team to stop the mass execution of people by a mad overlord who wants the depleting resources for himself, and his people only, the thief discovers that the plague never left and that could cost him everything.
I agree with Mike - this sounds fun. I'll give this a crack... I kept wanting to say "In a post-apocalyptic world" or "Set in the future" ha. But there's no sign of this being set in the future. After a plague devastates humanity, a thief must stop a megalomaniac from taking the world's depleting reRead more
I agree with Mike – this sounds fun.
I’ll give this a crack…
I kept wanting to say “In a post-apocalyptic world” or “Set in the future” ha. But there’s no sign of this being set in the future.
After a plague devastates humanity, a thief must stop a megalomaniac from taking the world’s depleting resources.
Could do “team of thieves” perhaps?
I love the idea of the setting/the bottom floor of a skyscraper but perhaps not necessary in a logline?
“- only to find the plague never left.” – I wanted to add. But… I dunno… There’s plenty of stakes here. The stakes are high – it’s the survival of the world.
I traded “mad overlord” with “megalomaniac” – as it’s one word. I dunno if he’s a tyrant. Could potentially use mad tyrant perhaps?
I also cut – “for himself.” at the end. I mean he’s clearly up to no good ha.
Anyways – that’s what I’ve got.
Good luck!
See lessWhen sinister agents abduct him and his mother, an exceptionally gifted but socially isolated Indian teen discovers that he was genetically engineered for a dark purpose and must choose to either embrace that purpose or fight back on behalf of humanity.
If you had to carve this down, it would be... When his mother is abducted by sinister agents, a teenage loner must fight back on behalf of humanity. - So we're missing some stakes/what happens if he doesn't fight back. Those guys above are right. I think you need to write down a few pages on your thRead more
If you had to carve this down, it would be…
When his mother is abducted by sinister agents, a teenage loner must fight back on behalf of humanity.
– So we’re missing some stakes/what happens if he doesn’t fight back.
Those guys above are right. I think you need to write down a few pages on your thing, what it’s about, what will or could happen. It will give you a better understanding of what’s going on.
After that the logline will be a lot more precise and specific. You’ll be able to carve it down – and then it will look really fucking good.
Good luck.
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In a story, you have a lead character Something happens to that lead character This causes the lead character to have a goal. However, achieving that goal isn't easy because something stands in the lead character's way. Who is the lead character? What do they want? What is standing in their way?
In a story, you have a lead character
Something happens to that lead character
This causes the lead character to have a goal.
However, achieving that goal isn’t easy because something stands in the lead character’s way.
Who is the lead character?
What do they want?
What is standing in their way?
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