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When a Commander of the largest military force in the universe, telepathically thwarts an assassination attempt by an obstinately powerful female warrior. He tricks her into facing and ultimately destroying her evil mirror double. A double that’s the source of her own power.
That whole telepathic stuff sounds great for how the commander defeats the assassin warrior, but it doesn't belong in the logline.? It's written more like a synopsis, where you just say how the hero wins the day... the end.? What you want to do is explain the situation, and what the hero must figureRead more
That whole telepathic stuff sounds great for how the commander defeats the assassin warrior, but it doesn’t belong in the logline.? It’s written more like a synopsis, where you just say how the hero wins the day… the end.? What you want to do is explain the situation, and what the hero must figure out how to do.
After an attempted assassination of the Commander of the largest military force in the universe, he finds himself pitted against an obstinately powerful warrior and must find a way to defeat her.
Maybe that?
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Surely the best person to fly this thing is not a race car driver but an astronaut... trained in this kinda thing. When the space programme started, they didn't choose people who were just used to travelling at speed. They chose people who were intelligent and exceptional pilots... key word is pilotRead more
Surely the best person to fly this thing is not a race car driver but an astronaut… trained in this kinda thing. When the space programme started, they didn’t choose people who were just used to travelling at speed. They chose people who were intelligent and exceptional pilots… key word is pilots. Just because the driver is used to going fast doesn’t mean he can fly, so why would anyone think he was a better choice than the leading astronaut at that time? Someone who can fly and is also used to speed and has had psychological training to deal with such a situation. A race car driver just makes no sense to me at all.
You’re telling us they must induce a second ice-age… but why? To what end. That’s the goal. Why does a second ice age need to be induced bearing in mind that most plants and animals on earth will die?!
I stand by my previous thoughts on light speed travel. If light speed is possible, then everything changes. Everything is possible at that point unless you’re adding to what we currently know about light speed travel. If that’s the case, we NEED that information to understand how this could work.
I think the idea that we will all be destroyed by Mother Nature is a good inciting incident BUT what your characters seem to do about it makes very little sense right now. There needs to be something that grounds it in reality even if it is a SciFi. How would light speed travel induce an ice age??
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LOGLINE UPDATE #3: A hip-hop musician contends in a friendly competition between celebrities, over who will collect eight billion fans first and gain enough supernatural power to bring death to every one of their followers.
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A hip-hop musician contends in a friendly competition between celebrities, over who will collect eight billion fans first and gain enough supernatural power to bring death to every one of their followers.
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