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A young boy must complete an ancient and deadly rite of passage to prevent being reincarnated into a dying world when his father returns
The bit about "his father returning" is the thing I don't follow, I think.? I'd try to include some hint of why his father returning is bad.? Also, this young boy... is not a young boy, necessarily, right?? He's a young boy's spirit following a premature death?? Seems like that needs to be defined bRead more
The bit about “his father returning” is the thing I don’t follow, I think.? I’d try to include some hint of why his father returning is bad.? Also, this young boy… is not a young boy, necessarily, right?? He’s a young boy’s spirit following a premature death?? Seems like that needs to be defined better too.? Also, a rite of passage being deadly doesn’t seem a concern when you’re in the afterlife already.? It’s possible the boy is somehow doing this rite of passage in the world of the living…? if that’s the case, I don’t understand the “preventing being reincarnated” bit.
See lessIn a dystopia where emotions are a disease and love is a capital crime, two co-workers struggle to hide their feelings for each other while plotting to escape.
this sounds very interesting! Where will they escape to? Is it just a country or a place or all of earth? Otherwise, def got my attention.
this sounds very interesting! Where will they escape to? Is it just a country or a place or all of earth? Otherwise, def got my attention.
See less(4th revision) A vigilante hacker spies on a power-hungry corporation as they confirm reality itself can be manipulated like computer code, and finds herself in a race with them to leverage this power and stop them from controlling the world.
@sdanzig, I looked up Meyer's Book, "Off to be the Wizard". It is in the first instance a light comedy, then a fantasy, and last SciFi. And I think that is where the confusion comes in with your story.From what you previously posted, I thought you wanted to tell a serious SciFi story that explored tRead more
Scott Danzig, I looked up Meyer’s Book, “Off to be the Wizard”. It is in the first instance a light comedy, then a fantasy, and last SciFi. And I think that is where the confusion comes in with your story.
From what you previously posted, I thought you wanted to tell a serious SciFi story that explored the nature of reality. Meyer’s book doesn’t do that. It is a science fiction version of Twain’s? “A Connecticut Yankee in King Arthur’s Court”. Those books work because they are humorous, light entertainment. For a moment of fun, people are wiling to suspend their disbelief to a far greater extent than would be for a thriller, because in a comedy all they ask for is laughs.
If you classify your story as a comedy, not SciFi, and make it funny enough, then people will laugh and forget the questions about who ultimately controls the computer. We accepted all kinds of nonsense in Men In Black, because it was first of all a comedy. That film would not have worked as a thriller.
If it was your intention all along to create a SciFi comedy, then I apologize for the misunderstanding.
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