1. Posted: September 25, 2022In:

    To stave off financial ruin, an inexperienced businessman assumes control of a startup to complete their artificial intelligence project while suffering ever changing investor demands.

    Hallucigenia Penpusher

    Tweaking: To stave off financial ruin, an inexperienced businessman assumes control of a startup to complete their artificial intelligence project under pressure from ever changing investor demands.

    Tweaking:

    To stave off financial ruin, an inexperienced businessman assumes control of a startup to complete their artificial intelligence project under pressure from ever changing investor demands.

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  2. Posted: September 12, 2022In:

    A high school student moves with her mother, her grandmother and her two aunts, she discovers that they and other people around her as disguised as aliens.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi tony18, This sounds like a synopsis more than a logline to me. You are telling your story in a short paragraph. I suggest 1- Correcting grammar/spelling 2- Use the logline "generator" and/or 3- Click on the "Formula" icon at the top of this page and study the content carefully. Good Luck

    Hi tony18,

    This sounds like a synopsis more than a logline to me. You are telling your story in a short paragraph. I suggest
    1- Correcting grammar/spelling
    2- Use the logline “generator”
    and/or
    3- Click on the “Formula” icon at the top of this page and study the content carefully.

    Good Luck

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  3. Posted: September 11, 2022In:

    An independent inventor develops the first faster-than-light drive to take humanity to the stars, usurping a solar system of greedy corporations and vengeful governments.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Hallucigenia, Here's how I understood the story so far based on your loglines: A man invents a faster-than-light vehicle to transport humans to the stars and becomes a commercial threat to the government-supported corporation that wants him out no matter how. I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Hallucigenia,

    Here’s how I understood the story so far based on your loglines:

    A man invents a faster-than-light vehicle to transport humans to the stars and becomes a commercial threat to the government-supported corporation that wants him out no matter how.

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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