1. Posted: March 14, 2019In:

    Jesus Christ returns to earth with a sword, living under an alias, he does battle with the Devil to save his daughter’s soul.

    Caleb Tumanako Logliner

    Contact me, caleb.danielt@gmail.com?I believe we can work together as I've had a similar story in the making. But here's my take - it can either be quite comedic, or serious.?"When Jesus of Nazareth returns to Earth, completely unrecognizable, he recruits his elect from our modern new world to folloRead more

    Contact me, caleb.danielt@gmail.com?I believe we can work together as I’ve had a similar story in the making. But here’s my take – it can either be quite comedic, or serious.

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    “When Jesus of Nazareth returns to Earth, completely unrecognizable, he recruits his elect from our modern new world to follow him into Tel Megiddo to finally untangle mankind from an AI-led and dependent “new world”.

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  2. Posted: March 13, 2019In:

    In a survivalist?s bomb shelter following the nuclear apocalypse, An adolescent mechanic is prematurely woken from cryogenic hibernation by a childhood friend out of desperation. Over last sixty years, he has been trying to fix the bunkers only reusable chamber in solitude due to limited rations. In order to save himself and the remaining sleeping colony, he must not only perform a seemingly impossible repair that has stumped more qualified individuals for multiple lifetimes, but cope with the inevitable isolation following his aged-friend’s death in the process.

    Mike Pedley Singularity

    I like the idea of this friendship in the bomb shelter situation. It's great! But, as variable pointed out, this problem has stumped qualified individuals for multiple lifetimes... and he's simply a teenage mechanic. I feel like this is a stretch. Can there be a reason why it has to be this kid? OrRead more

    I like the idea of this friendship in the bomb shelter situation. It’s great! But, as variable pointed out, this problem has stumped qualified individuals for multiple lifetimes… and he’s simply a teenage mechanic. I feel like this is a stretch. Can there be a reason why it has to be this kid? Or this time? Maybe there’s something that they had to wait 60 years for? Why has his friend waited til now to wake him? Give us reasons why all these elements have to happen like this and again, as variable suggested, give us more conflict and this could be great.

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  3. Posted: March 4, 2019In:

    When humans war with each other in the Matrix, Neo emerges to help the Agents maintain his peace deal until a newer anomaly arises in the form of a man who is being influenced by fragments of Smith’s code. (The Matrix 4 Concept)

    Mike Pedley Singularity

    There appears to be two inciting incidents here, the start of the war between the humans and the arrival of this new anomaly.Who is the protagonist? What's their goal?This seems to be just a set up. What happens next?

    There appears to be two inciting incidents here, the start of the war between the humans and the arrival of this new anomaly.

    Who is the protagonist? What’s their goal?

    This seems to be just a set up. What happens next?

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