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With a wish granted, an angry and disillusioned man becomes a powerful god and must prevent the ordinary authorities from circumventing his goal to cleanse the earth of evil.
I agree with Mike. You can't have a Goliath be the protagonist and little David be a weak antagonist. Now, having an "ordinary" public sector employee or police officer facing a godlike villain, yes, that could produce some empathy.
I agree with Mike. You can’t have a Goliath be the protagonist and little David be a weak antagonist.
Now, having an “ordinary” public sector employee or police officer facing a godlike villain, yes, that could produce some empathy.
See lessAfter overhearing his father’s disappoinment at having the only kid without superpowers, a wicked-smart teenager fights to prove his worth by trying to stop a supervillain?s plot to eliminate everyone?s special abilities.
I like this idea but give the protagonist WAY more flaws. Contrast him with everyone around him happy and using super powers to make life easier but he still struggles with basic human competency.? In spite of the odds he still has a WILL to prove himself. He doesn?t have to accomplish much to be heRead more
I like this idea but give the protagonist WAY more flaws. Contrast him with everyone around him happy and using super powers to make life easier but he still struggles with basic human competency.? In spite of the odds he still has a WILL to prove himself. He doesn?t have to accomplish much to be heroic but he can still be contextually amazing.? ?Being super smart is a super power in its own right so subverts the intentions of the plot quite a bit.? How else can he prove himself? I?m sure there must be something more primal.? Have him Thwart the enemy but it can?t be easy.? He has to struggle.? He succeeds because he wants to.? Or he could have some plot armor where the enemy?s power is to take the power of who ever he faces so when he faces the protagonist it is a basic fist fight? Having no power in this case would be a HUGE advantage.
When a villain with the ability to use the power of his foes against them emerges, an ordinary teenager must rise to the challenge and prove you don?t need powers to be a hero.?
See lessThe Lord living under an alias tries to reconcile with his estranged daughter who is a member of SWAT, but kills to police officers in self defense and not only finds himself at war with a brutal police force, but his daughter and now the salvation of humanity hangs in the balance.
To further the Superman analogy I used in your last logline attempt:---Let's say Jimmy Olsen and Clark Kent get into a dispute at work.? Jimmy Olson discovers that his lunch is missing from the break room. This has happened before and now Jimmy is angry. Someone is eating his lunch which he clearlyRead more
To further the Superman analogy I used in your last logline attempt:
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Let’s say Jimmy Olsen and Clark Kent get into a dispute at work.? Jimmy Olson discovers that his lunch is missing from the break room. This has happened before and now Jimmy is angry. Someone is eating his lunch which he clearly marked.
Jimmy is sure that Clark Kent is the culprit and confronts him. The two argue?loudly but the dispute is not resolved,
The next day Jimmy retaliates by putting a bunch of salt in Clark Kent’s lunch. Clark can’t prove Jimmy did it but he knows it was him.
The situation escalates, as both men retaliate against one other with petty revenge tactics, soon the entire paper gets caught up taking sides in the dispute.
Finally, Perry White calls them in the office to mediate, when he can’t resolve the issue, he ends up firing Jimmy Olsen because it is clear both men can’t work together.
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Here is the problem, Nothing about this plotline is necessary?for “Superman” to be the lead character; the lead character could be Joe Schmo with no superpowers and the story could have the exact same plotline. It might make for an interesting ‘B’ storyline but if you are going to write about Superman it should be about him saving the world from an evil Super Villian.
Why is Jesus necessary for your story? What is it about your story that it has to be Jesus instead of just an ordinary man who has an estranged?daughter and gets into a fight with the police?
Because that one extra thing which makes your script need to have Jesus as your lead character will be your hook; and the hook should be in your logline.? So I would add why the lead character must be Jesus and not Joe Schmo, and in doing so, it will greatly improve your logline.
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