1. Posted: November 2, 2017In:

    A smart sophisticated woman has all the control in her career life but in her personal life, the control is slowly slipping out of her hand. One day, an encounter with her husband leads to a decision she’ll deeply regret.

    Richiev Singularity

    Also the event should lead to a goal. What does your lead character want. (Specifically)

    Also the event should lead to a goal. What does your lead character want. (Specifically)

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  2. Posted: November 1, 2017In:

    A smart real estate agent, has the career of a lifetime but her married life is an exact opposite of what she pretends it to be. One morning brings about secrets and lies that send her down a rabbit hole.

    Fandango1980 Logliner

    Hi Lz, Thank you for sharing your logline with us! A logline needs 3 parts... A protoganist an antagonist (force) and a goal. What we now have is a discription of a protoganist and her goal is to make her family life as exciting as her job? Who or what is holding her back (antagonist)? Let us know!Read more

    Hi Lz,

    Thank you for sharing your logline with us!
    A logline needs 3 parts… A protoganist an antagonist (force) and a goal.
    What we now have is a discription of a protoganist and her goal is to make her family life as exciting as her job?
    Who or what is holding her back (antagonist)?

    Let us know!

    Thanks,

    Aschwin

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  3. Posted: November 1, 2017In:

    A smart sophisticated business woman comes across a document that ends up pushing her to a limit beyond her control.

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    dpg Singularity

    As others have noted.? The logline is vague and presents her as a passive, reactive victim of the document.? Protagonist's are supposed to be proactive not reactive. The document contains a discovery.? The discovery constitutes the inciting incident. That needs to be stated with greater specificity.Read more

    As others have noted.? The logline is vague and presents her as a passive, reactive victim of the document.? Protagonist’s are supposed to be proactive not reactive.

    The document contains a discovery.? The discovery constitutes the inciting incident. That needs to be stated with greater specificity.

    As a result of this discovery, she must do something.? What must she do?? What becomes her objective goal?

    I suggest you consult “Formula” at the top of the web page for guidelines on writing an industry standard logline.

    fwiw

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