1. Posted: October 31, 2017In:

    A lady gets home to a surprise for a date, she awaits the surprise only to be more surprise at the turn of events

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Jibby, I'm confused at what the plot is for your thriller. You need to check out the formula for writing a logline and then applying it to what happens in your own story in a clear, razor-sharp and short-as-possible sentence. Good luck,

    Jibby,

    I’m confused at what the plot is for your thriller. You need to check out the formula for writing a logline and then applying it to what happens in your own story in a clear, razor-sharp and short-as-possible sentence.

    Good luck,

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  2. Posted: October 27, 2017In:

    A soldier returns from war to bury his parents and tend to his sister who remains in a coma. He soon discovers her constant sexual abuse and seeks revenge on her behalf. ~this is a revenge film in the vein of Taken meets Identity~

    pedrots Penpusher

    After losing his parents a [adjective] soldier returns home to care for his comatose sister, only to find out she's been sexually abused for years. Enraged, he hunts down the people who hurt?his?only surviving family member.Thoughts?

    After losing his parents a [adjective] soldier returns home to care for his comatose sister, only to find out she’s been sexually abused for years. Enraged, he hunts down the people who hurt?his?only surviving family member.

    Thoughts?

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  3. Posted: October 31, 2017In:

    An established private investigator that unintentionally causes an international disaster by crashing a drone into a flying airliner must decide between turning himself in or covering his tracks and attempting to start a new life.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    As a drone flyer, I'm curious as to what choice he makes. Mind divulging? Lol But yes, where is the identifying conflict for the audience coming from here?

    As a drone flyer, I’m curious as to what choice he makes. Mind divulging? Lol

    But yes, where is the identifying conflict for the audience coming from here?

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