1. Posted: August 8, 2017In:

    A young party girl finds herself lost in the woods and is confronted by a hoody who wants to frighten her with stories of the Suicide Forest.

    dpg Singularity

    The logline sets up a situation for a plot, but fails to follow through with presenting a plot. ' Who is protagonist, the party girl or the hoody? ?And what is the protagonist's objective goal? ?What's the obstacle and/or antagonist who stands in the way of that goal? And what's at stake?

    The logline sets up a situation for a plot, but fails to follow through with presenting a plot.
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    Who is protagonist, the party girl or the hoody? ?And what is the protagonist’s objective goal? ?What’s the obstacle and/or antagonist who stands in the way of that goal? And what’s at stake?

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  2. Posted: August 4, 2017In:

    An Amature Drug-dealer decides to sell drugs by Dark Web, But he realizes it is not like he thought.

    Dkpough1 Uberwriter

    Well, I can't disagree with there being a stigma against drug dealers and that it won't be the easiest sell. Even though there are a number of fictional, and non-fictional characters in films, television, and books who deal drugs yet are very popular. Just saying that all drug dealers are bad peopleRead more

    Well, I can’t disagree with there being a stigma against drug dealers and that it won’t be the easiest sell. Even though there are a number of fictional, and non-fictional characters in films, television, and books who deal drugs yet are very popular.

    Just saying that all drug dealers are bad people is simplifying people to one trait. No one is just one thing, and they shouldn’t be defined by one unsavory thing. They’re human beings, with good and bad. They just made a bad decision.

    I know people who have dealt and used drugs. They were high school kids. Are they terrible people? What about pharmacists, they technically deal drugs, are they terrible people? ?People abuse prescription drugs just like illegal ones.

    There are multiple loglines featuring other types of criminals, including assassins and other people who have no qualms about killing. I haven’t seen you react like this to any of those concepts. Are people who are (exclusively) drug dealers really worse than murderers? High school kids?

    I’m not saying they don’t need a goal that an audience can’t cheer on. I don’t know what experiences you’ve had that have shaped your opinion on this, but dealing drugs is hardly the worst thing in the world, and the people who deal them are people, too.

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  3. Posted: August 6, 2017In:

    When a world renowned psychiatrist dies and goes to Hell, he is given a second chance at life to make amends with the family he ignored, not knowing he is part of a bigger plan for Hell to dominate Earth.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with the above. The inciting incident is really his realization that hell is about to take over the world, therefore, his subsequent goal needs to be formed in response to this. What is it he does to stop hell from rising to the surface?

    Agreed with the above.

    The inciting incident is really his realization that hell is about to take over the world, therefore, his subsequent goal needs to be formed in response to this.

    What is it he does to stop hell from rising to the surface?

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