1. Posted: May 25, 2017In:

    After cops investigating space piracy are publicly killed, the Homicide Detective must solve the piracy case before the murderer kills him or his family

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    There are a few fundamental elements that are unclear about this concept: What does "...publicly killed..." mean? Is the detective investigating the killing of the cops or deaths resulting from the piracy? Why must he solve the piracy case?

    There are a few fundamental elements that are unclear about this concept:

    What does “…publicly killed…” mean?

    Is the detective investigating the killing of the cops or deaths resulting from the piracy?

    Why must he solve the piracy case?

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  2. Posted: May 16, 2017In:

    After a space piracy witness and two cops are publicly murdered, the Senior Investigator must escape from the murderer and solve the piracy case before his family or more cops are killed

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    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    What is the setting for this adventure? Is it contained on a spacecraft somewhere? Cause then we can begin with murders occuring there and our investigator is contained with the murderer in that space -- makes things more dangerous that way.

    What is the setting for this adventure? Is it contained on a spacecraft somewhere? Cause then we can begin with murders occuring there and our investigator is contained with the murderer in that space — makes things more dangerous that way.

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  3. Posted: May 16, 2017In:

    To avenge his mentor?s murder, a former assassin realizes he?s the hunted, setup to achieve their end he must fight his own disenchantment to destroy them before they destroy a founding principle of the country.

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    I actually think this is actually a step back from the edit Foxtrot25 made to your earlier draft:?To avenge his mentor?s murder, a former assassin must take down the shadow government he used to work for before they destroy the integrity of the country. My attempt: While avenging his mentor's murderRead more

    I actually think this is actually a step back from the edit Foxtrot25 made to your earlier draft:?To avenge his mentor?s murder, a former assassin must take down the shadow government he used to work for before they destroy the integrity of the country.

    My attempt:
    While avenging his mentor’s murder, a disenchanted?assassin becomes a pawn in a scheme to corrupt the government and must take down those responsible to save his country and clear his name.

    Though, I am not sure exactly what a ‘disenchanted assassin’ is exactly?

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