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CIUDAD DE LOS ANGELES OSCUROS (CITY OF DARK ANGELS) When a peace loving man?s loved ones are murdered by a marauding gang of vampires he is forced to control the bloodlust tasted by the secret uncontrollable demon he unleashes to exact revenge
I like your revision Richiev. I think I need to add a "ticking time bomb element" if possible to this logline. When his loved ones are murdered by a pack of vampires, a pacifist is granted one night to unleash the demon hidden inside him, turning the hunters into the hunted.?
I like your revision Richiev.
I think I need to add a “ticking time bomb element” if possible to this logline.
When his loved ones are murdered by a pack of vampires, a pacifist is granted one night to unleash the demon hidden inside him, turning the hunters into the hunted.?
See lessBERSERKER When a pack of vampires rampaging through Los Angeles murder his loved ones, a pacifist has one night to unleash his inner demon turning the hunters into the hunted
"When a pack of vampires rampaging through Los Angeles murder his loved ones, a pacifist has one night to unleash his inner demon turning the hunters into the hunted" The inciting incident is worded a bit awkwardly. I think the idea is interesting of a pacifist, having to go outside of his comfort zRead more
“When a pack of vampires rampaging through Los Angeles murder his loved ones, a pacifist has one night to unleash his inner demon turning the hunters into the hunted”
The inciting incident is worded a bit awkwardly. I think the idea is interesting of a pacifist, having to go outside of his comfort zone to fight. But that raises the question: How? How does one man, who doesn’t even like fighting, take on vampires, supernatural beings? Beings which are stronger, faster than humans, and can suck his blood out? Rather than the vague description of “turning the hunters into the hunted” tell us how this happens. Is he a vampire? A werewolf? What gives him the ability to face vampires at night, when they have their power? Describe this inner demon.
Example:?When his family is killed by rampaging vampires, a pacifist must use his magic power to destroy them and save the city. (22)
See lessI just have one last question. What’s the hook of this story? What distinguishes it from other vampire stories? So far the only thing that has the potential to stick out is whatever power the protagonist holds. Saying that, if he’s just another vampire fighting more vampires then it’s basically just a rehash of “Blade” and other stories.
BLOODLUST When a peace-loving Hindu man witnesses his brother and girlfriend murdered in a convenience store robbery it triggers one of his past lives as an 8th Century Norse Berserker. Now he must fight to control the bloodlust before it destroys him and more innocent lives.
BLOODLUST The dormant past life as an 8th Century Norse Berserker is sparked in a modern day peace loving Hindu man after he witnesses his loved ones murdered in a robbery. ?Now he must fight to control the growing bloodlust before it destroys him.
BLOODLUST
The dormant past life as an 8th Century Norse Berserker is sparked in a modern day peace loving Hindu man after he witnesses his loved ones murdered in a robbery. ?Now he must fight to control the growing bloodlust before it destroys him.
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