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After she covers up a murder, an ambitious cop must escape the clutches of the disturbed young man that blackmails her.
Even if she didn't commit the murder, her covering it up is just as bad - empathy will be a problem. I think the story really starts when the man blackmails her - it reads like the inciting incident. If you want to keep her an anti-hero (you're a braver writer than I...), find a away to give her a nRead more
Even if she didn’t commit the murder, her covering it up is just as bad – empathy will be a problem.
I think the story really starts when the man blackmails her – it reads like the inciting incident. If you want to keep her an anti-hero (you’re a braver writer than I…), find a away to give her a noble motivation for doing the cover up, and then change the order around so it reads as if the blackmail is the inciting incident. Obviously give her a clear goal, now that she is being blackmailed what MUST she do in order to rectify the situation?
See lessWhen a struggling reporter unknowingly steals a CIA hitman’s phone, he must save the next person on the hit list to expose a government cover up.
As Nir Shelter said. ?Why must the reporter do the hit man's job? ?Why doesn't the reporter just let the hit man solve his problem by killing the target who threatens to expose him?
As Nir Shelter said. ?Why must the reporter do the hit man’s job? ?Why doesn’t the reporter just let the hit man solve his problem by killing the target who threatens to expose him?
See lessAn overly curious high-school boy, has to reveal the killer of a flawless homicide, with his newfound psychic power, before the murderer, who also possess such power, finds him first and kills him along with his family, in a run and chase in both sub-concious and physical world.
Good suggestion by DPG. I think combing psychic powers as a subject matter with a thriller genre is great - it sounds interesting. However, you need to integrate the psychic powers elements into the fabric of the story. DPG's rework is a good place to start, but I believe can be improved on. No offeRead more
Good suggestion by DPG.
I think combing psychic powers as a subject matter with a thriller genre is great – it sounds interesting. However, you need to integrate the psychic powers elements into the fabric of the story. DPG’s rework is a good place to start, but I believe can be improved on.
No offense DPG, lots of respect for you and you know it!
How about him having murderous urges himself. He uses his psychic powers to find the best victim for his first kill, but discovers someone else is like him. Then once in the other student’s twisted mind he sees how bad it is, and undergoes a fundamental change as a person – he now feels the need to protect people from the killer and goes after him. This gives you a mid act 2 reversal combined with a powerful inner journey to overcome a major character flaw.
For example:
See lessAfter a psychic sociopath witnesses visions of a brutal murder in a fellow high school student’s mind, he feels compelled to protect the intended victims by stopping the killer.