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During the festive week of Christmas, a lonely student, recovering from a break up, is tormented by an unknown entity in red when he writes a spiteful letter to Santa.
Leaning towards: “A recently dumped student is tormented by an entity dressed in red when writing a spiteful letter to Santa.” OR “When getting dumped over the Christmas break, a spiteful student …” Opinion: Inject a healthy dose of intrigue to strengthen your thriller plot e.g., question his sanityRead more
Leaning towards:
“A recently dumped student is tormented by an entity dressed in red when writing a spiteful letter to Santa.”
OR
“When getting dumped over the Christmas break, a spiteful student …”
Opinion: Inject a healthy dose of intrigue to strengthen your thriller plot e.g., question his sanity.
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See lessA retired cavalry soldier is forced to partner with a Cheyenne Indian to track down a serial killer who has kidnaped his daughter.
Maybe play up the idea that he's traumatized by something that the Native Americans did to him during the war so it contrasts with the idea that he has to team up with a Cheyenne Indian to save his daughter. Works for me, otherwise.
Maybe play up the idea that he’s traumatized by something that the Native Americans did to him during the war so it contrasts with the idea that he has to team up with a Cheyenne Indian to save his daughter. Works for me, otherwise.
See lessA headstrong and impulsive youth steals £230 million of mob funds and stays one step ahead of the top mob enforcer until he decides to donate it to a charitable cause.
"headstrong and impulsive youth" = protagonist "steals £230 million of mob funds" = inciting incident "donates it to a charitable cause" = inciting incident "stays one step ahead of the top mob enforcer" = main character goal Great logline. Has a heist film meets thriller feel to it. 'Impulsive charRead more
“headstrong and impulsive youth” = protagonist
“steals £230 million of mob funds” = inciting incident
“donates it to a charitable cause” = inciting incident
“stays one step ahead of the top mob enforcer” = main character goal
Great logline. Has a heist film meets thriller feel to it.
‘Impulsive character steals large sum of money from bad guys’ seems to indicate that the character arc might be from Impulsive -> through to -> Considered, as a main character trait transformation. In a strange way, donating a large sum of stolen money to a charitable cause, also seems (to me anyhow) a bit impulsive too. A Charity is best to accept ‘clean money’, and while donating has thoughtful and considered qualities, our said character hasn’t really thought things through.
How then might our unpredictable character find himself in a stop and think situation? And I guess the answer is when the bad guys catch him. Makes me think of ‘A Clockwork Orange (1971)’, where an overly confident character eventually finds himself in a torturous, and institutional situation. Wonder if this logline might benefit from more detail on the nature of the main character’s problem and its potential for transformation.
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