1. Posted: June 14, 2016In:

    When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed by a car salesman he enlists the salesman?s captivating assistant to help seek compensation but her unorthodox methods and pranking involvement becomes creepy.

    Wayne Logliner

    Thanks Nir,? I see what you mean!? Below is another draft.?? I could cut off the end about the "assistant", but she is a big part of the story (an ally shapeshifting to villain): When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed and left without a car to operate his business, he seeks compensatRead more

    Thanks Nir,? I see what you mean!? Below is another draft.?? I could cut off the end about the “assistant”, but she is a big part of the story (an ally shapeshifting to villain):

    When an attention seeking YouTube prankster is scammed and left without a car to operate his business, he seeks compensation but deviates into darker territory of vengeful blackmail, robbery and murder when he is wooed by the scammer?s sociopathic assistant.

    Any tips / comments are greatly? appreciated.

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  2. Posted: June 15, 2016In:

    When his nuclear experiment erupts and infects a city?s atmosphere, a novice scientist covers up the accident and must concoct a cure before an aspiring journalist uncovers the truth.

    dpg Singularity

    Bernstr?m suggests a a more interesting and credible scenario.Because in fact, it ?would be relatively easy to detect the leakage, even trace it back to its source, it incites authorities to overreact. ?They jump to the conclusion it was a terrorist attack. Panic and paranoia ensue.Since the genre iRead more

    Bernstr?m suggests a a more interesting and credible scenario.

    Because in fact, it ?would be relatively easy to detect the leakage, even trace it back to its source, it incites authorities to overreact. ?They jump to the conclusion it was a terrorist attack. Panic and paranoia ensue.

    Since the genre is thriller, there has to be an element well-justified fear. ? The radioactive leakage could have been the result of a Doh! moment by an inexperienced technician, but ?what if his intentions were not benign?

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  3. Posted: June 10, 2016In:

    After a vampire-supremacist wages a war to enslave humanity, his lieutenant, determined to stop him, partners with a celebrated vampire baroness to sabotage his faction through assassination, terrorism, and subterfuge.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    I, like DPG, assumed the Baroness was human as well. There is a fundamental flaw in the concept - when the stakes are an entire race being enslaved there is very little empathy available for the mere power play of a handful of enslavers. Why not have a good guy or gal fighting for the freedom of humRead more

    I, like DPG, assumed the Baroness was human as well.
    There is a fundamental flaw in the concept – when the stakes are an entire race being enslaved there is very little empathy available for the mere power play of a handful of enslavers.
    Why not have a good guy or gal fighting for the freedom of humanity?

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