I think the potentially intriguing concept wants for sufficient details to ?wet a ?reader’s interest in the script. ?For example, “Psychological exodus” is vague and nonspecific. ?And “break with her past” doesn’t tell us what to look forward to in the story. ?And what is the ideological purpose of this “feminist cult.” ?Overthrow the patriarchy? Pass ERA? Or…? ?What makes this cult of dramatic interest, a threat to the prevailing order and/or a hope for repressed and subjugated women?

As?a result of joining the cult, what becomes her specific objective goal? ?What is the? specific dramatic problem that she must resolve? ? Who/what opposes her — who becomes her nemesis? ?What’s at stake — what does she stand to gain if she succeeds, lose if she fails.