1. Posted: October 22, 2020In:

    When a serial killer uses his exploits as inspiration to become a screenwriter, issues arise when he suspects a colleague of wanting to steal more than just his work.

    Odie Samurai

    Interesting, think about the following when reconstructing the logline. 1. What was the event that made him say “hmm, I’m going to be a writer”? I’m looking for a (serial killer size) inciting incident 😊. 2. Can “screenwriter” be replaced with a novelist to capture more of an audience? Stephen King’Read more

    Interesting, think about the following when reconstructing the logline.
    1. What was the event that made him say “hmm, I’m going to be a writer”? I’m looking for a (serial killer size) inciting incident 😊.
    2. Can “screenwriter” be replaced with a novelist to capture more of an audience? Stephen King’s a novelist, you get the idea.
    3. I cannot envision “issues arise” what was the most critical issue? You may find later this will change or you could lose altogether.
    4. Who is this colleague – his ghostwriter? A rival serial killer?
    5. What else does this colleague want to steal? I mean, I wouldn’t want to steal anything from a guy who skins people 😉 but… maybe that other thing is your hook?

    Take care.

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  2. Posted: October 26, 2020In:

    When two reckless young women witness a drug deal involving a well-respected social media star, they must expose the celebrity before they are killed.

    Richiev Singularity

    Maybe up the ante a little. ------------------------------------ "When a stalker witnesses her favorite online streamer kill his social media partner, she must go on the run before her obsession ends her stream, forever." ------------------------------------- Because she is an obsessed stalker (WithRead more

    Maybe up the ante a little.
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    “When a stalker witnesses her favorite online streamer kill his social media partner, she must go on the run before her obsession ends her stream, forever.”
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    Because she is an obsessed stalker (With a record) the police don’t believe her.

    It could be a take on “Rear Window”, but instead of witnessing the murder because the lead is at home bored because of a broken leg, the lead witnesses the murder in the process of stalking the celebrity.

    She sneaks into the house of her celebrity obsession to get a piece of memorabilia but instead witnesses the murder.

    Now she is on the run and no one believes her, not even her family, boyfriend, or psychiatrist.

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  3. Posted: October 26, 2020In:

    After watching his girlfriend struggle with an abusive work environment and her self-esteem coming to shreds over a period of time, an unemployed man who feels indebted to her sets out to confront everyone who mistreats her. Things take a turn when all these people start showing up dead and she becomes the prime suspect of the killings.

    Richiev Singularity

    Your lead character seems a step away from the action. His girlfriend is the one abused at work, his girlfriend is the one who is the prime suspect. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ "When she is accused of killing an abusive co-worker, a disgruntled workaholicRead more

    Your lead character seems a step away from the action. His girlfriend is the one abused at work, his girlfriend is the one who is the prime suspect.
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    “When she is accused of killing an abusive co-worker, a disgruntled workaholic, with the help of her boyfriend, must discover who is behind the plot to frame her for murder.”

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