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A retired rock star visits an imprisoned ex band-mate for the first time in 10 years, to reveal a life-changing secret. The two?of?them recall their bands early days as teenagers, its successes/problems as a satanic themed heavy metal group and its eventual downfall.
As mikepedley85 said. What's the source of tension?? What's the dramatic problem that MUST be solved? What is the retired rock star's objective goal?? And what are the stakes-- why should we in the audience care what happens (or not)?
As mikepedley85 said.
What’s the source of tension?? What’s the dramatic problem that MUST be solved? What is the retired rock star’s objective goal?? And what are the stakes– why should we in the audience care what happens (or not)?
See lessWhen forced into a deadly game show by Vatican City Cyber-Soldiers, a meek heretic must formulate an escape, else be torn to shreds in their ‘Koloseum’.
I like the sound of this, but I was wondering if you could increase the stakes if the cleric has to try and rescue others as well? (Otherwise, he/she comes off a bit selfish imo!)
I like the sound of this, but I was wondering if you could increase the stakes if the cleric has to try and rescue others as well? (Otherwise, he/she comes off a bit selfish imo!)
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Who leads the trio?? Who is the alpha-character?? Whoever that is probably should be the designated protagonist and the logline should be written to focus on that character.>>>their goalsGoals, plural?? Aren't the trio striving for the same goal?? A plot is about the pursuit of a singular gRead more
Who leads the trio?? Who is the alpha-character?? Whoever that is probably should be the designated protagonist and the logline should be written to focus on that character.
>>>their goals
Goals, plural?? Aren’t the trio striving for the same goal?? A plot is about the pursuit of a singular goal, even when it involves multiple characters.
And? how does “unusual espionage assignment” translate into a concrete, objective goal?? For the purpose of a logline “unusual” isn’t really unusual? because it’s SOP in a thriller for the protagonist to be tasked with an “unusual” assignment.? The objective goal needs to be spelled out.? Be specific. One cannot assume that logline readers are familiar with the book so as to know what the assignment is.? Nor that they will take the effort and time to read the book to find out.? ?For the genre,? the “unusual” assignment is the “game ball ” (as Blake Snyder of “Save the Cat!” fame put it) and a logline needs to show the game ball — not hide it.
>>>They parted ways when they were children, and only in the strange reality of 1Q84 do they have a chance to find each other again.
That’s back story, hence extraneous to a logline.? A logline is about the story looking forward in time, not looking back.
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