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Reeling from the loss of their eldest son to the war, a family welcomes the company of a mysterious soldier claiming to fulfill a promise to a fallen comrade.
Who is the main character? The father? The mother? Or the returned soldier?
Who is the main character? The father? The mother? Or the returned soldier?
See lessTITLE: A Psycho In The Cockpit. LOGLINE: A psycho in the cockpit. STORY IS ABOUT: A Psycho in the cockpit.
That's not a logline, it's a TAGLINE, but a good one! :)
That’s not a logline, it’s a TAGLINE, but a good one! 🙂
See lessA young man?s life begins to unravel when he receives? a mysterious text from his dead girlfriend?s cell phone.
What happens next? This is a great inciting incident but we need to know what the character is going to do about it. Can you give us some more information about this guy? "A young man" is an incredibly broad stroke for our protagonist. If the fact that he's a "young" man has no bearing on the storyRead more
What happens next? This is a great inciting incident but we need to know what the character is going to do about it.
Can you give us some more information about this guy? “A young man” is an incredibly broad stroke for our protagonist. If the fact that he’s a “young” man has no bearing on the story then consider giving us something else and make it relevant to the story you’re telling. In my head this story doesn’t change if this guy is 20 or 50. Also give us a characteristic. Something that will give us a clue either to the character’s arc or how he’ll deal with his situation.
Hope this helps.
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