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When a haunted family discovers that the ghosthunters they hired are criminals who capture then use ghosts for crime, the family must team up with the ghosts to take down the frauds.
Obviously, the ghosts would come off as unwanted at first but later be represented as the emotional-garnering people who the MC realizes are now worth saving from the antagonists. This is classic Spielberg misdirection here. And that's also where the character arc would come from. Pretty sure we areRead more
Obviously, the ghosts would come off as unwanted at first but later be represented as the emotional-garnering people who the MC realizes are now worth saving from the antagonists. This is classic Spielberg misdirection here. And that’s also where the character arc would come from.
Pretty sure we aren’t talking about the pest removal of bugs here. 😮
See lessWhen a hang slip breaks a house apart shortly after a frustrated mum and wife just told her workaholic husband that she wants a divorce, the whole family has to work together for the last time and survive, by helping each other on the safe side of the house, while its pieces are drifting away from minute to minute and might fall from the mountain soon.
Minutes after telling her husband she wants a divorce their house is caught in a landslide. She must work with her family to save each other before the house collapses. Still too wordy. People would help perfect strangers escape. You may want to think of something that puts more pressure on them andRead more
Minutes after telling her husband she wants a divorce their house is caught in a landslide. She must work with her family to save each other before the house collapses.
Still too wordy.
People would help perfect strangers escape. You may want to think of something that puts more pressure on them and would allow to decide not to help.
See lessWhen a female biologist visits a canadian mountain to search for bears, she discovers a small village that never had contact with modern civilization since the villagers came from europe in the 17th century, and she has to fight for her life when the mayor thinks she might be a witch and they should burn her.
Female is a poor description for an MC. For starters, you wouldn't describe the MC as male if he were a man. Secondly, 'female' is perfectly generic (it describes half the population in the world) and therefore means nothing in a logline. Best you describe an MC with their major flaw and let the proRead more
Female is a poor description for an MC. For starters, you wouldn’t describe the MC as male if he were a man. Secondly, ‘female’ is perfectly generic (it describes half the population in the world) and therefore means nothing in a logline. Best you describe an MC with their major flaw and let the pronoun inform the reader as to the gender especially seeing as it’s relevant in this case.
The most important thing a logline should do is describe a goal, so what does she do after being accused of witchcraft?
Last note is to shorten it, here is an example:
See lessAfter a biologist stumbles across an isolated village of settlers’ descendants, she is accused of witchcraft by the mayor and must educate the people to save her own life.