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  1. Posted: January 9, 2018In: Thriller

    When her husband is murdered, a headstrong businesswoman must turn to a tortured past and deadly skills to hunt down the killer and save her own life.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on January 9, 2018 at 11:13 pm

    Agree with Foxtrot25 and Nir Shelter.? What skill set does "her tortured past"? give her to identify and apprehend the murderer?? And they have offered examples of slipping that information in without bloating the logline.

    Agree with Foxtrot25 and Nir Shelter.? What skill set does “her tortured past”? give her to identify and apprehend the murderer?? And they have offered examples of slipping that information in without bloating the logline.

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  2. Posted: January 7, 2018In: Thriller

    When a grieving widow learns her husband took a bullet intended for her, she must survive long enough to discover who wants her dead.

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    Neer Shelter Singularity
    Added an answer on January 8, 2018 at 7:47 am

    Agreed with Richiev. It took me some time to understand the premise as well (this is telling...) and it would seem that further explanations are needed for the logic to come through - best to make some significant changes to the concept so this isn't the case. The whole taking a bullet and grievingRead more

    Agreed with Richiev. It took me some time to understand the premise as well (this is telling…) and it would seem that further explanations are needed for the logic to come through – best to make some significant changes to the concept so this isn’t the case.

    The whole taking a bullet and grieving widow aspects are confusing the point. The event that starts her on her journey is the husband’s murder, therefore the logline should start with:
    After her husband is murdered…

    Then the action she takes is to hunt down the killer, so:
    After her husband is murdered, a [good description MC] must hunt down the killer to save her own life.

    As it stands now, the MC description is very generic and therefore I don’t know what kind of person she is or what ability she has to survive/catch/figure out who the killer is.

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  3. Posted: March 12, 2017In: Thriller

    The hunter becomes the hunted when a woman lures her abusive husband into a death trap. (Short Script, 7pages)

    variable Uberwriter
    Added an answer on January 7, 2018 at 4:03 am

    why forced to kill amongst other, more practical solutions? could reveal catalyst in a great catharsis, boiling disgust in the mind of an audience-making him root the protagonist-just enough to kill... ...still risky cool logline though, good luck with your short story!

    why forced to kill amongst other, more practical solutions?
    could reveal catalyst in a great catharsis, boiling disgust in the mind of an audience-making him root the protagonist-just enough to kill…
    …still risky

    cool logline though,
    good luck with your short story!

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