1. Posted: May 18, 2019In:

    An Army flight medic risks his own life day in and day out while desperately trying to save the lives of injured soldiers and civilians in Iraq.

    dpg Singularity

    Okay, so "One week before the end of their tour [inciting incident], a medivac crew must..."Well, must what?? I'm guessing they're emotionally exhausted and hoping to glide through that last week and then go home, only to be assigned one last mission, that portends to be the most stressful and dangeRead more

    Okay, so “One week before the end of their tour [inciting incident], a medivac crew must…”

    Well, must what?? I’m guessing they’re emotionally exhausted and hoping to glide through that last week and then go home, only to be assigned one last mission, that portends to be the most stressful and dangerous of their tour.

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  2. Posted: August 14, 2018In:

    “When her domineering boyfriend forces her to join the army the Potomac with him, a meek farmgirl fights for the North and for her relationship as she succeeds in battle just as his cowardice grows.”

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    Richiev Singularity

    Thanks guys! I knew there was a reason to write a logline first. You are right, she must sign up of her own free will. Her choice not a situation forced upon her.

    Thanks guys! I knew there was a reason to write a logline first.

    You are right, she must sign up of her own free will. Her choice not a situation forced upon her.

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  3. Posted: June 26, 2018In:

    In the world of Remnant, the Faunus face oppression, deportation and subjugation at the hands of humanity. After a young Sienna Khan’s ambitious miners revolt ended in calamity she was pulled from the ruins by Kali of the resistance and her childhood friend, Ghira. With humanities war against the Faunus entering a new stage with Dr Merlot’s terrible machines of war, these young heroes may end up being all that stands between their people and being consigned to certain doom on Menagerie.

    Nettle Samurai

    I can see your ambitious plot but you need to clear out your idea first. The previous one lacked specifics and this overloads it. Apply geometric mean. Something like:When machine-powered Remnants repress and diminish his conventional-tribe, Faunus, a young valiant Faun must form an alliance to defeRead more

    I can see your ambitious plot but you need to clear out your idea first. The previous one lacked specifics and this overloads it. Apply geometric mean. Something like:

    When machine-powered Remnants repress and diminish his conventional-tribe, Faunus, a young valiant Faun must form an alliance to defend/ fight for his race.

    Again the version I stated may or may not represent your idea but at least you have an idea, as where you can make cuts in your logline description.

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