1. Posted: March 4, 2014In:

    After five years of wrongful imprisonment in the Space Justice Federations (SJF) penal colony, Instead of walking free and into the arms of his wife, ex SJF cop Taylor must outwit a malfunctioning, psychotic, shape shifting android that is using prisoners to re-enact macabre scenes from old horror movies to gain his freedom. 2. On the day of his discharge, after serving five years wrongful imprisonment by the Space Justice Federation (SJF), SJF cop Taylor should be a free man. Instead of walking into the waiting arms of his wife,Taylor finds a malfunctioning, psychotic, shape shifting android that is using prisoners to re-enact macabre scenes from old horror movies stands between him and this reunion .

    kimberly Penpusher

    this is a synopsis, not a logline. Logline's say all of that in one or two sentences :-)

    this is a synopsis, not a logline. Logline’s say all of that in one or two sentences 🙂

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  2. Posted: July 10, 2014In:

    A desperate father, forced to hijack a plane by terrorists who have his kids, must outwit the resourceful air marshall on his trail after his flight is cancelled and all the passengers are sojourned to a cheap airport hotel.

    BlakeH Penpusher

    Hi, I'd put a little less detail in the 'forced to hijack a plane' section because it feels a little irrelevant and top-heavy by the end.

    Hi, I’d put a little less detail in the ‘forced to hijack a plane’ section because it feels a little irrelevant and top-heavy by the end.

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  3. Posted: June 9, 2014In:

    A surveillance operator struggles to keep her team from falling apart as they pursue the crime syndicate that murdered her brother during an unsanctioned operation.

    ah.marni Penpusher

    This is interesting but I think it is a little unclear if the 'unsanctioned operation' is the pursuit that the surveillance operator is leading, or the murder of her brother. Perhaps it is the use of 'during' that is confusing. Having said that, I think the stakes and the story are compelling.

    This is interesting but I think it is a little unclear if the ‘unsanctioned operation’ is the pursuit that the surveillance operator is leading, or the murder of her brother. Perhaps it is the use of ‘during’ that is confusing. Having said that, I think the stakes and the story are compelling.

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