1. Posted: November 23, 2016In:

    Healing from the car accident that killed her husband, the young author purchases a mysterious antique mirror and falls in love with the handsome reflection who tells her fascinating stories of daring and adventure and betrayal.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    What DPG said. How about: After falling in love with a mysterious reflection of a handsome man in an ancient mirror she found, a widow must work with a wizard to free her new love from a mirror world entrapment. Just an example of how to include the death of her former husband, an inciting incidentRead more

    What DPG said.

    How about:

    After falling in love with a mysterious reflection of a handsome man in an ancient mirror she found, a widow must work with a wizard to free her new love from a mirror world entrapment.

    Just an example of how to include the death of her former husband, an inciting incident and goal.

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  2. Posted: August 17, 2016In:

    On Loglines: There are certain answers to logline problems that many of us seem to repeat as we give advice.

    SouthWestSusie Logliner

    Great suggestions. Will save. Thank you. :)

    Great suggestions. Will save. Thank you. 🙂

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  3. Posted: August 20, 2015In:

    After a botched robbery, two incompetent thieves must avoid the authorities and elude a serial killer who they carjacked.

    Leannf411 Logliner

    I love it. Would just change the last part - they can't elude the serial killer if they are all in the same car - maybe just reword this bit.

    I love it. Would just change the last part – they can’t elude the serial killer if they are all in the same car – maybe just reword this bit.

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