I like the irony of a “fraud investigator” having to use her skills of investigation and deceit to track down a criminal father.? There is a potential character redemption arc here that could elevate the story above?being?just a?cross between “Focus” and “The Italian Job” (or “Oceans Eleven”?).

I don’t have a problem with the apparent convolution of plot elements as this is right in keeping with many contemporary screen stories – such as ‘Mission Impossible’ movies, “Focus”, ?”The Mentalist”, “Persons of Interest”, even “Terminator: Genisys” and ‘Avengers/Ultron’.

My main issue with the logline [which is apparently an improvement from one or two past] is that the daughter/investigator needs a more compelling motive than simply to resolve a “puzzle”.? Was she expecting a cut of the profits?? Has she done a deal with the FBI to get off charges against her?? Is her daughter or mother being held hostage by a crime lord (or even third world dictator or? black ops mercenary company) who wants the heist back in their hands?? Any of these more dramatic pushes or pulls – especially with a ‘ticking clock’ implied – would make the character motivation (and therefore story concept) stronger and more engaging.

Steven.