1. Posted: March 12, 2023In:

    When a suicidal man’s car plunges into the sea. he must confront his inner demons and fight to distinguish between reality and a vivid dream before he drowns.

    Odie Samurai

    Leaning towards: “A suicidal man trapped between reality and illusion must confront his inner demons in order to escape a watery grave.” Do you hate drowning scenes as much as I do? Give’s me chills… Keep going!

    Leaning towards:
    “A suicidal man trapped between reality and illusion must confront his inner demons in order to escape a watery grave.”

    Do you hate drowning scenes as much as I do? Give’s me chills…

    Keep going!

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  2. Posted: February 28, 2023In:

    A middle-aged man’s obsession with storytelling traps him in a mystical world of his own creation, where he must navigate dangerous obstacles and confront his deepest fears in order to escape. With the guidance of a wise owl, Cameron discovers that the only way out is to confront the darker aspects of his imagination and find the courage to embrace reality once again

    amandis98 Penpusher

    or would something like: "when a struggling writer becomes trapped in his own fantastical world, Cameron, a middle-aged man who finds comfort in storytelling, must find his way back to reality before his obsession becomes his undoing. As he journeys through his own imagination, facing dangerous obstRead more

    or would something like: “when a struggling writer becomes trapped in his own fantastical world, Cameron, a middle-aged man who finds comfort in storytelling, must find his way back to reality before his obsession becomes his undoing. As he journeys through his own imagination, facing dangerous obstacles and battling inner demons, Cameron must confront the painful memories that have led him to lose himself in his own tales. ” be better?

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  3. Posted: February 19, 2023In:

    When Cara, a reclusive writer, befriends a woman who believes she’s the fictional character Jane Eyre, she finds a new sense of purpose in helping Jane navigate the complexities of modern life. When the writer’s estranged brother turns up with questions about their past, Cara must finally untangle her own truth from fiction.

    Richiev Singularity

    I like how you ended the logline using the words, truth, and fiction. Here is an attempt to shorten your logline a bit. Hope I didn't drop too many story elements in doing so. ----- "When she befriends a woman claiming to be Charlotte Bronte's fictional Jane Eyre, a reclusive writer must help Jane nRead more

    I like how you ended the logline using the words, truth, and fiction.

    Here is an attempt to shorten your logline a bit. Hope I didn’t drop too many story elements in doing so.
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    “When she befriends a woman claiming to be Charlotte Bronte’s fictional Jane Eyre, a reclusive writer must help Jane navigate the modern world all while trying to untangle the truth of Jane’s existence from the fiction.”
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    Hope that helped

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