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When a toilet embarks on a journey to self discovery, his dreams are flushed away when a catastrophic injury causes his flush valve to remain open.
It needs a rewrite regardless. Valve being stuck is the obstacle. What does he do to resolve this to reach his/her goal.
It needs a rewrite regardless.
Valve being stuck is the obstacle. What does he do to resolve this to reach his/her goal.
See lessA reaper is going to take an old man life,but the old man want to finish his life checklist before the reaper get him.
This logline falls in line with your others, therefore, I suggest you read the comments made on your other posts and apply them to this one. One point to consider here is the lack of clarity about the protagonist - the Grim Reaper or the old man? Once you decide who the main character is, like withRead more
This logline falls in line with your others, therefore, I suggest you read the comments made on your other posts and apply them to this one.
One point to consider here is the lack of clarity about the protagonist – the Grim Reaper or the old man? Once you decide who the main character is, like with the other loglines, give him a reason to need to achieve a specific goal.
See lessA loud-mouthed pizza delivery driver is pursued by the Italian Mafia when he steals their cash to impress his arrogant friends. EDIT: A loud-mouthed pizza delivery driver is pursued by the Italian Mafia when he reveals that they run his pizzeria to impress his arrogant friends.
As Richiev said.If he were stealing the money because his sainted mother needs it for an expensive, life saving operation which she can't afford because she can't afford health insurance, then the audience would sympathize with her plight as it's one that millions of Americans are in. ?So they wouldRead more
As Richiev said.
If he were stealing the money because his sainted mother needs it for an expensive, life saving operation which she can’t afford because she can’t afford health insurance, then the audience would sympathize with her plight as it’s one that millions of Americans are in. ?So they would have a good reason to root for him.
But his motivation is egocentric — it’s all about him.
On the point that you are setting up the scenario to play out the character realizing that things can spin out of control, that’s hardly a unique twist or story hook. ?The best functional definition of a plot I ever read is: ?”The plot is a conspiracy against the protagonist”. ? So, ?of course, things go awry, the fit hits the shan. That’s standard issue plotting.
fwiw
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