1. Posted: May 27, 2016In:

    It?s the late 1970?s in apartheid Johannesburg, when the father of a curious, black 10yr old boy is arrested for his involvement in an ANC terrorist bombing, the boy?s family seek political asylum in Australia and need to leave urgently. The boy is determined to find a way to free his father, he speaks to his dreams and they lead him to an unlikely ally who makes the impossible possible.

    RussellN Samurai

    Simply rephrasing what you wrote, I get this (26 words): In apartheid Johannesburg, when his?father is arrested and his?family seek urgent asylum, a young black boy uses his dreams to find an unlikely ally.

    Simply rephrasing what you wrote, I get this (26 words):

    In apartheid Johannesburg, when his?father is arrested and his?family seek urgent asylum, a young black boy uses his dreams to find an unlikely ally.

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  2. Posted: November 10, 2016In:

    When a graffiti outbreak in a small town corresponds with recent child abductions in the county, a nerdy teenage boy has to crack the codes to save the children and become the town hero.

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    RussellN Samurai

    Well I certainly learnt from this example. My take would be: When a nerdy teenager's sister becomes another abductee, he must first crack the clues ?in a graffiti outbreak to attempt a rescue.

    Well I certainly learnt from this example. My take would be:

    When a nerdy teenager’s sister becomes another abductee, he must first crack the clues ?in a graffiti outbreak to attempt a rescue.

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  3. Posted: September 13, 2016In:

    Breaking Bad: A terminal diagnosis leads a cash-strapped, loving father to the hostile world of illicit drug manufacture and its deadly associations.

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    When a meek, ?cash-strapped chemistry teacher is diagnosed with terminal cancer, he starts cooking meth to provide for his family after his death. (23 words)After re-viewing the pilot episode for "Breaking Bad", ?I decided to revisit this as an ?example of how to write a logline for ?a series. ?AndRead more

    When a meek, ?cash-strapped chemistry teacher is diagnosed with terminal cancer, he starts cooking meth to provide for his family after his death.
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    After re-viewing the pilot episode for “Breaking Bad”, ?I decided to revisit this as an ?example of how to write a logline for ?a series. ?And the way to do ?that is to focus on the script for the pilot episode that launches the series. ?The job of the pilot episode is 1] sell the series to producers; and then 2] hook viewer interest. ?The pilot script is the proof of concept and if it doesn’t make the sale, the series is DOA.

    The logline (and pilot script) for “Breaking Bad” ?does more than set up the inciting incident and objective goal for the action that drives the series. ?The description of the character flaw lays down the baseline for the transformation arc of the protagonist, Walter White.

    Initially, he’s the kind of guy who gets no respect; ?everybody including his students rolls over him. ?(It’s a great scene ?where relationship rolls are reversed; the teacher who gives orders to students in the classroom has to take them from the same kids at the car wash.) ?His new career as a meth cook will drive a 180-degree reversal in his behavior; ?he goes from being a milquetoast becomes a drug lord to be feared as well as respected, the one who comes knocking.

    And the logline and pilot lay down the baseline for the reversal of his financial fortune. He goes from being cash-strapped to having more cash than he knows what do with or where to stash.

    For me, the pilot episode for “Breaking Bad” is a model in how to launch a series.

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